Wow. This is like a dictionary of creepy words, but formatted by a post-prime Billy Corgan.

I agree with Tilde (what a surprise) about the comma after pretty. However, the first stanza has a problem: the rhyme of the last two lines somehow sounds like there should be other rhymes. I didn't like that here, for some reason. Also, 'plume': doesn't seem to quite work. 'Plumes' perhaps, or even 'plumage', but plume in the singular I don't quite like. It must be the sound of it, because I agree that sense-wise, it'S perfect.

Fine. Don't listen to me.

Not that I necessarily disagree with the poem (especially since I've never seen your legs), but whether or not a hairy female leg is nice or not depends on the shape of the leg. As a rule, hairy ones will be just as nice when shaved, though the reverse is not necessarily true.

The first two lines aren't bad. The rest...

'And how often do we separate our masters from the leash' -- what?

But fuller, un-sucked-in stomachs make better drums!

Yeah, and I've got news for you: being a poet doesn't get you laid like it used to, when Wordsworth and Coleridge could get non-scaggy college girls whenever they wanted without waiting or foreplay.

Nice.

"My plight for water" is worth a ten. The rest's an eight.

The ...... is only distracting. Typo in line 6. Some good lines here, but what are you saying?

When a dying person realizes the futility and knows the person he's crying out to wants to help but there's nothing she can do, then you are near the end. Well said, if that's what you mean. Leave out "thee" though.

amost of the rhymes seem forced. Still it's a good sentiment.

I dont know about htis one it was written a year ago, you lot decide.

You're probably too young to know that for one glorious summer the name on everyone's lips was Evan Dando.

Why sculptured instead of sculpted? As it is you have 'a statue sculptured', a verb which I can only imagine means 'made like a statue'. In other words, making sculpted 'sculptured' adds no meaning at all and eliminates an easy chance to add meaning. On a constructive note, I think it would be helpful for you to add actual, modern details about Rome. Seriously.

you nailed it. bravo.

i want to feel you from the inside.

this line doesn't jibe for me: It is almost like a dream today, because you are out of time, now. or at least that's the mood you set with the opening strophe.

the ending is quite lyrical, cad, but somehow the rest falls short.