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A LOVERâS TORMENT (Acrostic) by anushree A chilly winter night as the wind blew I huddled
Near the mantel beneath which the flames burned
Near the warmth but yet as cold as frost
A blizzard blew outside to make any being lost
Hoping for Providence to stop the torrential storm
Until I hear the footsteps of my beloved's form
Near the mantel he must stand in flesh and blood
This I demand from the lord above before the overwhelming flood
Up the ladder:
Makin' Bacon
Down the ladder:
Poppy,diamond,s and twoo coward's
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Posted: October 22, 2005 1:24 AM PDT; Last modified: October 22, 2005 1:24 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.2689414 Overall Rank: 3884 Comments:
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Dovina @ 17.255.240.138
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22-Oct-05/11:22 AM
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amost of the rhymes seem forced. Still it's a good sentiment.
Very beautifully worded. may be a bit forced, but on the whole you could justify your choice of words. Your presentation of the theme is what stands out. Good work.
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