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A LOVER’S TORMENT

by anushree

Member since 2005 · Posted 22 Oct 2005 · 2 comments

A chilly winter night as the wind blew I huddled Near the mantel beneath which the flames burned Near the warmth but yet as cold as frost A blizzard blew outside to make any being lost Hoping for Providence to stop the torrential storm Until I hear the footsteps of my beloved's form Near the mantel he must stand in flesh and blood This I demand from the lord above before the overwhelming flood

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[6] Dovina 22-Oct-05/11:22 AM Reply
amost of the rhymes seem forced. Still it's a good sentiment.
[8] amanda_dcosta 16-Jan-06/9:32 AM Reply
Very beautifully worded. may be a bit forced, but on the whole you could justify your choice of words. Your presentation of the theme is what stands out. Good work.