Re: The Christian Submariner by Sing4Jesus!	rabbi sammy schtupp 194.83.172.121	23-Oct-10/6:46 AM
Fucking awful.
Re: Poemranker is Back! by Dovina	lmp 72.79.209.72	5-Nov-10/6:18 PM
was it gone? i missed the downtime....
Re: dictates of whose travel agency? by A. Nomaly	A. Nomaly 61.90.124.118	9-Nov-10/3:01 AM
fixed, five years later, hey I'm lil slow
Re: Best friends by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 75.84.73.162	16-Nov-10/10:14 AM
Sounds like the mother of a good son or the memory of a child with a good brother
Re: courtyard by lmp	amanda_dcosta 82.178.138.236	26-Nov-10/11:10 AM
Very nice feel to this short verse. Picturesque.
Re: tree in a flood by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:07 PM
Hey, settle down, its all too fast. Delayed gratification. Yes, please, make it last!
Re: Late Song by nypoet22	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:08 PM
I gave up after the first verse. Get specific or get out!
Re: Mornings by alvinb	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:09 PM
I hate these boring suicide poems!
Re: Self-Inflicted Wounds by wilco	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:11 PM
You used to be better than this. What the hell's gone wrong?
Re: My Brain by T. Jonathron Remp	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:12 PM
hehe
Re: That man looks so familiar by A. Nomaly	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:13 PM
best in the last ten posted :)
Re: tree in a flood by Skamper	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:22 PM
it's got a good skeleton but it's a bit flabby. one verb is worth ten adjectives and adverbs. this is how i read it: "i feel your caresses, blown, sending tingles with rivulets. i awake, intensify, bend, stretch, accommodate. i am peaking, fulfilled. you're rushing. i am satisfied, saturated. your hunger magnifies, breaking pieces, caresses and kisses, lashings and torrents. you are raging, i am subdued, swayings and rustlings, thrashings, anchored. i give. i am.
Re: Mornings by alvinb	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:27 PM
there's a bit of ambivalence about the topic. if this is not about suicide, it may be more interesting than it initially appears.
Re: Self-Inflicted Wounds by wilco	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:32 PM
a lot of religious images here. is there something more personal to your own experience that would add meaning?
Re: Thanks by Dan garcia-Black	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:01 PM
heh, brown noser.
Re: My Brain by T. Jonathron Remp	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:06 PM
interesting! if you start with circus of circuits and remove "of slime. everlasting," it'd be a damnfine haiku.
Re: That man looks so familiar by A. Nomaly	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:12 PM
very sensory, i like it. first line is a bit incongruent with the rest, and so is the middle line. what effect were you going for?
Re: (untitled) by A. Nomaly	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:19 PM
the tone and voice are polished. i like this even better than the other one. i may be mistaken but i think you meant either latched or leashed rather than lashed. otherwise top notch.
Re: Freedom by amanda_dcosta	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:27 PM
i like a lot of this, but there are a few blips that i think don't work. "held tight in grip" is clunky, you can word it a bit better. "despair" sounds cliche. disrepair? roadside flare? dining room chair? almost anything would be better there than despair. a good effort though, at a difficult form.
Re: Beslan by Ranger	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:35 PM
absolutely beautiful, wish i had been around when you posted it. love the interplay between musical and religious themes and the horror of the real life event.