Re: driftwood by ThePariahDog	Dovina 111.88.56.68	11-Oct-10/12:33 AM
I remember the ancient times when, if memory presents truth, you were young and wrote young. Now this is good, shrouded just enough. Poemranker is abandoned now, all hands jumped ship. It must leave an able seaman wondering why he signed on.
Re: The Christian Submariner by Sing4Jesus!	rabbi sammy schtupp 194.83.172.121	23-Oct-10/6:46 AM
Fucking awful.
Re: Poemranker is Back! by Dovina	lmp 72.79.209.72	5-Nov-10/6:18 PM
was it gone? i missed the downtime....
Re: dictates of whose travel agency? by A. Nomaly	A. Nomaly 61.90.124.118	9-Nov-10/3:01 AM
fixed, five years later, hey I'm lil slow
Re: Best friends by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 75.84.73.162	16-Nov-10/10:14 AM
Sounds like the mother of a good son or the memory of a child with a good brother
Re: courtyard by lmp	amanda_dcosta 82.178.138.236	26-Nov-10/11:10 AM
Very nice feel to this short verse. Picturesque.
Re: tree in a flood by Skamper	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:07 PM
Hey, settle down, its all too fast. Delayed gratification. Yes, please, make it last!
Re: Late Song by nypoet22	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:08 PM
I gave up after the first verse. Get specific or get out!
Re: Mornings by alvinb	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:09 PM
I hate these boring suicide poems!
Re: Self-Inflicted Wounds by wilco	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:11 PM
You used to be better than this. What the hell's gone wrong?
Re: My Brain by T. Jonathron Remp	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:12 PM
hehe
Re: That man looks so familiar by A. Nomaly	Dovina 208.127.228.72	12-Feb-11/8:13 PM
best in the last ten posted :)
Re: tree in a flood by Skamper	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:22 PM
it's got a good skeleton but it's a bit flabby. one verb is worth ten adjectives and adverbs. this is how i read it: "i feel your caresses, blown, sending tingles with rivulets. i awake, intensify, bend, stretch, accommodate. i am peaking, fulfilled. you're rushing. i am satisfied, saturated. your hunger magnifies, breaking pieces, caresses and kisses, lashings and torrents. you are raging, i am subdued, swayings and rustlings, thrashings, anchored. i give. i am.
Re: Mornings by alvinb	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:27 PM
there's a bit of ambivalence about the topic. if this is not about suicide, it may be more interesting than it initially appears.
Re: Self-Inflicted Wounds by wilco	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/10:32 PM
a lot of religious images here. is there something more personal to your own experience that would add meaning?
Re: Thanks by Dan garcia-Black	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:01 PM
heh, brown noser.
Re: My Brain by T. Jonathron Remp	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:06 PM
interesting! if you start with circus of circuits and remove "of slime. everlasting," it'd be a damnfine haiku.
Re: That man looks so familiar by A. Nomaly	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:12 PM
very sensory, i like it. first line is a bit incongruent with the rest, and so is the middle line. what effect were you going for?
Re: (untitled) by A. Nomaly	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:19 PM
the tone and voice are polished. i like this even better than the other one. i may be mistaken but i think you meant either latched or leashed rather than lashed. otherwise top notch.
Re: Freedom by amanda_dcosta	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:27 PM
i like a lot of this, but there are a few blips that i think don't work. "held tight in grip" is clunky, you can word it a bit better. "despair" sounds cliche. disrepair? roadside flare? dining room chair? almost anything would be better there than despair. a good effort though, at a difficult form.