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Freedom (Villanelle) by amanda_dcosta I love to be free again
Arise with the vibrant dawn
Away with these heavy chains
Into the tempestuous sky
Escaping where wild geese fly
I love to be free again.
My wings cannot be clipped
Nor my spirit held tight in grip,
Away with these heavy chains
Unlock the door of my cell
Hear the resounding toll of the bell
I love to be free again.
Breathe in the sweet, fresh air
No more suffocation or stale despair.
Away with these heavy chains
To roam without a care
Build nest or soar away.
I love to be free again
Away with these heavy chains.
Up the ladder:
How things should be...
Down the ladder:
The Mask
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Posted: November 26, 2010 11:07 AM PST; Last modified: November 26, 2010 11:07 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8668 Comments:
Try Harder.
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The phrases / words that you chose to mention were written specifically for each line. Each verse follows the imagery of 'being free' from some sort of bondage or clutch.
In the first verse it is - 'free from heavy chains',
2nd verse - to escape
3rd verse - spirit held tight in grip (can be interpreted in many ways)indicating a need to be free
4th verse - unlock door of cell / bell's ring of freedom
5th verse - breathe in freedom; free from suffocation of emotional or depressive struggles
6th verse - 'to roam' signifying being free
Every verse reflects the title and theme of the poem and hence these specific words were chosen. However, I will give it a second thought to what could be better than despair, although I do not find your suggestions fitting in with the theme. All the same, will think it over. Thanks for the review. :)