Re: Beslan by Ranger	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:35 PM
absolutely beautiful, wish i had been around when you posted it. love the interplay between musical and religious themes and the horror of the real life event.
Re: dictates of whose travel agency? by A. Nomaly	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:39 PM
i wonder how many people miss the point of this. conversational tone, stripped to the bone. in its own way, this works.
Re: wishlist by versus_u	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:40 PM
squeeze what back in?
Re: Jerusalem the Golden by rabbi sammy schtupp	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	12-Feb-11/11:43 PM
is this intended to be ironic? it's not a bad piece, but i think you may have been trying for a clearer and more biting message.
Re: Best friends by amanda_dcosta	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	13-Feb-11/12:27 AM
i have technical issues with this, but i can't even bring myself to voice them. it's just really sweet.
Re: Wish I was there... by amanda_dcosta	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	13-Feb-11/12:33 AM
this belongs on a hallmark card. it feels like you could use some minor tweaking in the language, but for what it is, i think it's pretty good.
Re: tree in a flood by Skamper	Skamper 120.156.164.180	18-Feb-11/2:51 PM
too quick and too flabby, hmmm something to ponder over. Thanks guys
Re: Late Song by nypoet22	Skamper 120.156.164.180	18-Feb-11/2:57 PM
Whenever I pine for you to be mine I remember what my father used to say You can have anything you want but you cant have everything you want at the same time If this is what you want you can't have me there's probably one too many wants...if this is what you need you can't have me and pine, really?
Re: Mornings by alvinb	Skamper 120.156.164.180	18-Feb-11/3:09 PM
oh dear...what do you think is for you proper? Sounds like you think you deserve something better, we have only what we create and if your creation is words, make them come alive.
Re: Self-Inflicted Wounds by wilco	Skamper 120.156.164.180	18-Feb-11/3:13 PM
at least your just rusty, I, on the other hand am flabby...takes a bit of getting back into it huh?
Re: It Is by Skamper	nypoet22 65.34.245.31	18-Feb-11/4:17 PM
it'd be funny if he said it's a big dinosaur that helps you with your homework :)
Re: Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/7:56 PM
A little "wordy" and somewhat essential and intrinsic. However, it works in a diminished cerebral way. 8-9 score
Re: Dance Of Insanity by forsaken	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/8:01 PM
Have you grown up dreaming of a disenfranchised Jeffrey Dahmer? He's dead. Come back.... come back to the World in which the rest of us live. Sanity is knot a b-b-bad thing.
Re: AIDS in a van by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/8:30 PM
There once was a poett named D'Angel Whose words try to be quite playful He'll work up a rhyme tho' he'll often commit grime 'cause to others he's often quite hateful.
Re: FHjk by Dark Angle	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/8:42 PM
There once was a man named d-Angle whose dick couldn't find a quadrangle he'd pop a blue pill which made him quite ill but his mum was left quite tranquil
Re: Two More Cunts Who Are One Cunt by mr cunt	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/8:46 PM
Stunt.... Stunk.... Stunts Wholly fun-k "Fat-Man"
Re: Journey To The Centre Of The Loom by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	ARTIE 66.69.245.233	31-Mar-11/8:50 PM
3rd stanza is somewhat weak but overall this is very good..... "return to tend the gloom"
Re: Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 82.178.134.19	22-Apr-11/2:13 PM
Glossary of music terms: Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence
Re: Song of Creation by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 208.127.228.144	23-Apr-11/8:42 PM
Appropriate to use the musical descriptions, since the old church, emerging from plainsong, invented them for church music. Can't escape that music emerged from worship, is part of it, always has been
Re: Jesus wept by amanda_dcosta	Dovina 208.127.228.144	23-Apr-11/8:44 PM
Even with unlimited power, he had emotion, compassion. Hard to beat that.