oh dear...what do you think is for you proper? Sounds like you think you deserve something better, we have only what we create and if your creation is words, make them come alive.

at least your just rusty, I, on the other hand am flabby...takes a bit of getting back into it huh?

it'd be funny if he said it's a big dinosaur that helps you with your homework :)

squeeze what back in?

is this intended to be ironic? it's not a bad piece, but i think you may have been trying for a clearer and more biting message.

i have technical issues with this, but i can't even bring myself to voice them. it's just really sweet.

this belongs on a hallmark card. it feels like you could use some minor tweaking in the language, but for what it is, i think it's pretty good.

too quick and too flabby, hmmm something to ponder over. Thanks guys

Whenever I pine for you to be mine I remember what my father used to say You can have anything you want but you cant have everything you want at the same time If this is what you want you can't have me there's probably one too many wants...if this is what you need you can't have me and pine, really?

A little "wordy" and somewhat essential and intrinsic. However, it works in a diminished cerebral way. 8-9 score

Have you grown up dreaming of a disenfranchised Jeffrey Dahmer? He's dead. Come back.... come back to the World in which the rest of us live. Sanity is knot a b-b-bad thing.

There once was a poett named D'Angel Whose words try to be quite playful He'll work up a rhyme tho' he'll often commit grime 'cause to others he's often quite hateful.

There once was a man named d-Angle whose dick couldn't find a quadrangle he'd pop a blue pill which made him quite ill but his mum was left quite tranquil

Stunt.... Stunk.... Stunts Wholly fun-k "Fat-Man"

3rd stanza is somewhat weak but overall this is very good..... "return to tend the gloom"

Glossary of music terms: Legato - string of notes, Fortissimo - very loud sound, Piano - soft (sound), Dolce - sweet, Mezzo-forte - moderately loud, Maestoso - majestically , forte - very loud, Silenzio - silence

Appropriate to use the musical descriptions, since the old church, emerging from plainsong, invented them for church music. Can't escape that music emerged from worship, is part of it, always has been

Even with unlimited power, he had emotion, compassion. Hard to beat that.

Here's my guide on "How to write a Shakespearean sonnet" for those who might be interested. http://poetry.helium.com/how-to/12786-how-to-write-a-shakespearean-sonnet

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