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Wish I was there... (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta There doesnât have to be a touch to feel
The pangs of love that gnaw inside my heart
There doesnât have to be your smell to tease
My senses wishing we were not apart
I do not have to hear your voice to know
That everything is right and youâre okay
Or wait for stolen moments to spend time
With you from day to every passing day
I know I donât have to do anything
To convince you I believe our loveâs for real
Nor be obligated to have you part
Of everything I do; no big ordeal
But I want to; it's a choice Iâve made
So you see what your loving me has done
You make me want to fly across to you
Not just my heart but life with you as one.
Up the ladder:
I love you Daddy, thank you Sweetheart
Down the ladder:
5 Point Something on the Richter Scale
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Posted: February 13, 2011 12:12 AM PST; Last modified: February 13, 2011 12:12 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.094852 Overall Rank: 6161 Comments:
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nypoet22 @ 65.34.245.31
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13-Feb-11/12:33 AM
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this belongs on a hallmark card. it feels like you could use some minor tweaking in the language, but for what it is, i think it's pretty good.
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