-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on some deleted poem
14 Apr 2004, 7:51 AM
You have a soiling for every occasion. If only I had a wipe for every occasion. -10-
funny
Funny.
I'm sorry, but you're not a native french speaker.
Stanza 2 is true only sometimes. Still some good ideas here.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
14 Apr 2004, 4:48 PM
just ask your bro for help before you do anything...but it's good
Use more sound-music besides rhyme in this poem
cute.
edpeterson
on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac
14 Apr 2004, 6:51 PM
Fucking hilarious that you chose sestina for the category. AHHAAHHAHHA.
HAHAHAHAHA. that is some funny ass bullshit kegparty poetry.
umm if you die, does the tunnel grow an end?
Sorry I know that it is really lame but hey so I can't write poetry, but at least I'm not the only one that can't.
Very interestin. Gorilla dicks and cheese twinkies? What is that all about?
Show, don't tell
Sasha
on Life on the Sidewalk (with superfluous vulgarisms) by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
14 Apr 2004, 7:28 PM
Not a sonnet
I liked your poem. I liked when you talked about the roller coaster. Although I don't like them either.
I love your poem. It is so true.
Not Iambic pentameter. Forced. Inverted, introverted. A bad poem in general
This is not iambic pentameter, rather amateurish in its construction, and, above all, makes no sense.