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Unseen Death (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool
As she waves goodbye, To her parents, She closes the door, Her house is, Empty and dark, All of a sudden she, Hears music, Coming from her room, She slowly creeps up, The staris, She walks down, The long dark hallway, And opens the door, Ever so slowly And sees nothing, Then she sees a dark, Figure move closer to her, Then she feels, A stabbing pain, As the scissors, Are inserted through, Her throat, As the killer, Slowly twists the scissors, Around in a circle, And then yanked them out, The blood slowly drips, Down the wall, As her cold dead body, Falls to the floor, The music plays on, Forever.


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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Weighted score: 5.1490035
Overall Rank: 5269
Posted: April 14, 2004 6:36 PM PDT; Last modified: October 19, 2004 9:49 AM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] Sasha @ 69.140.246.96 | 14-Apr-04/7:19 PM | Reply
Show, don't tell
[5] Dovina @ 24.52.156.155 | 19-Oct-04/2:18 PM | Reply
A short story with too many "then"s and commas, Not a poem.
[10] Sheeva @ 205.213.111.54 | 15-May-09/10:01 AM | Reply
Very Good i'd give it 20
It's a lil' broken up if you know wat i mean
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