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being human (Other) by ggawrysi
humans fail because humans fear. without fear there is no cheating there are no traitors wars dissappear. humans fail because humans are jealous. without jealousy there is no divorce there are no scandals abortions dissappear. humans believe that they are smartest for New York City the atomic bomb and the Internet. the dolphins believe that they are smartest for all the same reasons. humans fail because to have free will is to be imperfect.

Up the ladder: Forgiveness
Down the ladder: I Remembered, Upon Waking

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 5.537883
Overall Rank: 2551
Posted: April 13, 2004 10:41 PM PDT; Last modified: April 13, 2004 10:41 PM PDT
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[8] zodiac @ 67.240.192.23 | 14-Apr-04/3:59 AM | Reply
Stanzas 3-4 are copped from Doug Adams. To wit: "Humans think they are smarter than dolphins because we build cars and buildings and start wars, etc... and all that dolphins do is swim in the water, eat fish, and play around. Dolphins believe that they are smarter for exactly the same reasons."
[n/a] ggawrysi @ 147.9.151.22 > zodiac | 14-Apr-04/10:46 AM | Reply
i honestly didn't even think of that, but when i was trying to think of an animal to compare to humans dolphins just popped in. i guess it was in the back of my mind. ever hum a tune and think that you've created something original, only to go home and see a commercial with the same tune? same idea.
[n/a] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 > ggawrysi | 14-Apr-04/11:08 AM | Reply
dolphins are _verry_ eenteresting creatures; worthy of more exploration.

2 quick things, 1) they basically don't sleep and barely dream - 2) they have a sense of "self" that most other animals lack (they can recognize themselves in a mirror, for example).

I know, not much to do with the poem - but maybe it gives you some ideas.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 163.1.146.114 | 14-Apr-04/7:29 AM | Reply
you fail
[7] deleted user @ 17.255.240.6 | 14-Apr-04/1:55 PM | Reply
Stanza 2 is true only sometimes. Still some good ideas here.
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