| Re: sad bastard by FreeFormFixation |
3-May-04/3:20 PM |
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Good, i think done with the proper amount of restraint, (well, at least as much as can be exercised in a poem of this nature). I think perhaps a little cutting to shorten.
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| Re: The road to melancholy by INTRANSIT |
3-May-04/3:32 PM |
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Great. So many hours have i spent looking at those fucking cones, or horses or even the white lines, counting, smoking...
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| Re: Shame by Joe-joe |
3-May-04/3:38 PM |
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I think it is pretty fucking good. I like the way you cast shame in a postitive light. Though, frozen with fear, and the religious overtones detract. but what the fuck do I know? Nothing. ANd yet i wield a vote as sharp as any other....aint democracy grand?
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| Re: Natural Remedy by richa |
4-May-04/11:53 AM |
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I find it less readable now. Well, less clear.
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| Re: California triolets by zodiac |
5-May-04/7:25 AM |
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Good poem about california toilets, though i am not so sure the subject matter really reflects the title.
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| Re: American Idle by wilco |
5-May-04/7:27 AM |
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ANybody who curses at the cubs gets an automatic 10. though this was a very good poem on its own.
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| Re: Where Have All the Punk Rockers Gone? by wilco |
5-May-04/7:36 AM |
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| Re: The Influence of Anxiety by Nicholas Jones |
5-May-04/7:52 AM |
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I love it. There are far too many poetry snobs and pedants on this site. I say fuck poetry.
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| Re: On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic |
5-May-04/8:02 AM |
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I fail to see the connection between the two limericks, but I do not see a real need for connection... after all we can only post every 2 days. Funny limericks.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
5-May-04/8:03 AM |
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This has to be the worst poem that i have ever read. 10
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| Re: When she beats me by Win |
5-May-04/11:24 AM |
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| Re: Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone |
5-May-04/11:27 AM |
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HAHAHAHAHAHa. bearded with love.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
5-May-04/11:29 AM |
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the sheer horror causes me to avert my eyes and spin.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
6-May-04/6:45 AM |
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Feet is better than roots, because of the implication of dangling feet, a hanging. Think about deleting the parenthetical phrase. (You probably already have)
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7-May-04/8:45 AM |
i thought this was going to expand into an acrostic spelling out gas station. HEHEHE. I am a bit disappointed.
good poem.
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| Re: Epitaph by philn |
7-May-04/8:53 AM |
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| Re: love.term by ggawrysi |
7-May-04/8:55 AM |
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so.....where's the fucking?
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| Re: Obituary for the Moon by wilco |
9-May-04/2:27 PM |
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12-May-04/6:46 AM |
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damn good. think the first stanza is an especially well crafted set up for the analogy.
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| Re: Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic |
12-May-04/7:07 AM |
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