Good, i think done with the proper amount of restraint, (well, at least as much as can be exercised in a poem of this nature). I think perhaps a little cutting to shorten.

Great. So many hours have i spent looking at those fucking cones, or horses or even the white lines, counting, smoking...

I think it is pretty fucking good. I like the way you cast shame in a postitive light. Though, frozen with fear, and the religious overtones detract. but what the fuck do I know? Nothing. ANd yet i wield a vote as sharp as any other....aint democracy grand?

I find it less readable now. Well, less clear.

Good poem about california toilets, though i am not so sure the subject matter really reflects the title.

ANybody who curses at the cubs gets an automatic 10. though this was a very good poem on its own.

Don Henley??? Oi vey.

I love it. There are far too many poetry snobs and pedants on this site. I say fuck poetry.

I fail to see the connection between the two limericks, but I do not see a real need for connection... after all we can only post every 2 days. Funny limericks.

This has to be the worst poem that i have ever read. 10

The love bout.

HAHAHAHAHAHa. bearded with love.

the sheer horror causes me to avert my eyes and spin.

Feet is better than roots, because of the implication of dangling feet, a hanging. Think about deleting the parenthetical phrase. (You probably already have)

i thought this was going to expand into an acrostic spelling out gas station. HEHEHE. I am a bit disappointed.

good poem.

bunk

so.....where's the fucking?

Good song.

damn good. think the first stanza is an especially well crafted set up for the analogy.

haiku?