on Intimate Joy by flightoffancy
25 Oct 2005, 7:17 PM
The uncrossable void line doesn't really work
replying on Take Heart Mr. Drake, the Worst is Behind You by wilco
24 Oct 2005, 8:12 PM
There are parts I don't like and I'm working on it lyrically, but I got tired of fooling with it tonight. I hate the lost the fight line but thats how I want the line to go (flow wise) and I left it in so I don't forget it later.
on untitled rubiayait 2 by starkfister
24 Oct 2005, 7:54 PM
whut?
replying on In my palm by Prince of Void
24 Oct 2005, 7:52 PM
Come on feel The Lemonheads..
on Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac
24 Oct 2005, 6:57 PM
The falling into religion part is great and I rather like the -ly
on Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis. by SupremeDreamer
13 Oct 2005, 1:13 PM
Hey, haven't seen you in a while dreamersupremer.
On the subject of this poem..it's just too damn long and there's just not enough interesting here to necessitate it being that long (I started wishing for Cliff's Notes). It's good and I almst gave a 9 but it needs to be shortended.
On the subject of this poem..it's just too damn long and there's just not enough interesting here to necessitate it being that long (I started wishing for Cliff's Notes). It's good and I almst gave a 9 but it needs to be shortended.
on Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim
13 Oct 2005, 1:07 PM
I love the title. I don't like the poem, but I love the title.
replying on Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim
13 Oct 2005, 1:06 PM
OK, I feel the need to tell you that Poetry.com is a scam. Well, not really...you'll get your book but know this...it's not going to be sold at your local Barnes & Noble. They publish everybody that wants to be published. They give awards to everybody that pays them.
So, save your money, pal. If you've already paid..well keep the book on the coffee tabls, tell women you're a published poet and get some ass out of it.
So, save your money, pal. If you've already paid..well keep the book on the coffee tabls, tell women you're a published poet and get some ass out of it.
on untitled rhyme royal 3 by starkfister
13 Oct 2005, 12:58 PM
I want to give this a three but for some reason I like it....
replying on Rocky Road by Dovina
13 Oct 2005, 12:48 PM
Oh, come one, you know you saw the word tits and instantly got a hard-on.
on Skyline by MacFrantic
11 Oct 2005, 8:41 PM
Not bad, guy, but I think it's a little long....
on Keep on Going by april fool
11 Oct 2005, 8:29 PM
ok, will do. So, now take this advice and write yourself another poem.
on hide and seek by oneglove
4 Oct 2005, 8:35 PM
not bad.
on Pebbles by Verse2Verse
4 Oct 2005, 8:27 PM
Some good stuff here, but trim it a little.
on A Light in the Dark by Verse2Verse
4 Oct 2005, 8:25 PM
It started out okay but then just sort of meandered into mediocrity. Shorten it up and try saying what you want to say with less.
on The chestnut by richa
4 Oct 2005, 8:17 PM
not bad, rich, not bad at all.