Re: I'm walking thorough void by Prince of Void	1-Dec-05/2:48 PM
ummm...okay, first, you need to move on from the whole "void" angle. It's wearing thin. Also, try some different styles and variations. Either get some prozac or some liquor (but just enough). Most of the good stuff is about pain and depression, but you need to work on saying it in a new way and making it interesting. Also work on your grammar and adjectives. Often, your lines make little sense because you're trying to put too much into them.
Re: a comment on I'm walking thorough void by Prince of Void	1-Dec-05/2:44 PM
You're having sex before you log on every day aren't you.
Re: Silent Night by Dovina	30-Nov-05/3:44 PM
I'm not religious or anything but I just don't think turning a christmas carol into a naughty nursery rhyme is all that original. No offense, but it just doesn't seem any more so to me that Sasha's irritating translations.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	30-Nov-05/3:43 PM
And you're saying you're not any of those things? Someone on here once said I don't have any feelings....that hurt.
Re: a comment on Silent Night by Dovina	30-Nov-05/3:39 PM
Now, THAT's a poem.
Re: a comment on Low by wilco	28-Nov-05/2:24 PM
No, I'm not looking for low votes and the experiment is simply working on not discarding something that sounds good in a song simply because the lyrics aren't my best.
Re: Indian Song by ALChemy	28-Nov-05/2:21 PM
Wild man, bled in my vanities; My graven ancient, increase mass homicide. So little left of you to resurrect for you. Wild man God interred his head. I dunno...best I could come up with. 9 for making me think...I'd give you a 10 but you made me think and that pissed me off. ;)
Re: Low by wilco	26-Nov-05/10:08 PM
Just for the record, I absolutely fucking hate this...it's cheezy and cliche...there are a few things I like about it, though..it's something of an experiment.
Re: a comment on The Mask by TLRufener	26-Nov-05/8:32 PM
yep
Re: a comment on Colorbars by wilco	26-Nov-05/8:28 PM
Well, you've confused me...is it good or is it bad? lol
Re: a comment on Colorbars by wilco	25-Nov-05/9:22 AM
The last verse works in there as a fade out in the song. It reads differently than the others because the music changes somewhat at the end. The serenade is actually supposed to be promenade...I don't know why I wrote serenade...guess I was getting tired or got distracted or something.
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	24-Nov-05/5:50 PM
Sympathy for the Devil reference...nice..
Re: a comment on Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	24-Nov-05/1:41 PM
thanks.
Re: a comment on Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	24-Nov-05/1:40 PM
I wholeheartedly agree. This isn't even the best thing that I'VE written...much less the best thing on the site...of course that can be said for much of what's in the top 20. I think there needs to be a better system for determining the top peoms...oh well...what'r you gonna do..I don't run this outfit.
Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation	30-Oct-05/4:00 PM
Although I think you're completely misinterpreting Jeff Mangum's lyrics, there are still parts of this that I like (such as the third stanza). Also, points for knowing who Neutral Milk Hotel is...
Re: Tough Love by Crann Mascher	26-Oct-05/4:06 PM
Sounds like a Ween song off the 12 Golden Country Greats album....nice
Re: The cold shoulder by <~>	26-Oct-05/2:20 PM
constellation sex..
Re: a comment on Eternity by Dovina	25-Oct-05/7:36 PM
I object to the second half becauseI simpy don't like it. It doesn't strike me as being anything more than someone accepting their fate, which, In my view isn't anything new or exciting. You Christians seem to have an overly optimistic view of death in verse or conversation, but the tune often changes when the end is actually staring you in the eye (not all, but many).
Re: a comment on dialect by skaskowski	25-Oct-05/7:24 PM
mmm...1,000...1,500...1,999 soldiers lives...meaningless...now 2,000! That's a number we can get behind.
Re: MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears	25-Oct-05/7:21 PM
The third stanza is just not very good, but the rest isnt too bad...not real wild about the capitalized words either...I'm guessing you did it because they all have to do with time, but it's actually kind of distracting.