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The Mask (Free verse) by TLRufener You looked in the mirror and did not like what you saw
In a fit of rage you tore the mirror from the wall
In a desperate attempt to hide your horrid face
You fashioned an all-purpose mask to cancel your disgrace
You ran from the truth thinking no one would see
In all truth you are still the same person to me
I saw the face that you wanted to hide
I know the true person you are inside
No matter what you look like or what you do
There will never be a change in how I treat you
With all of you effort to change what they see
Who you are inside is all that ever means anything to me
Up the ladder:
genome home zone
Down the ladder:
Skeleton
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Posted: November 26, 2005 9:21 AM PST; Last modified: November 26, 2005 9:21 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9602656 Overall Rank: 8626 Comments:
Yeah, you have to wonder if you're really going to be able to convey your feelings and experiences and make an accurate account of your life and times if you can only write 13-syllable sentences...
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You need to get personal. Say things that are unique to your situation or perspective. We have no idea who the hell you're talking to. A lover? A friend? A man? A woman? Michael Jackson? Who?
Don't try to write a poem for everyone. If you do it will always turn out the same way. Hokey.