poemranker ::The Mask by TLRufener

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 134123

The Mask

by TLRufener

Member since 2004 · Posted 26 Nov 2005 · 3 comments

You looked in the mirror and did not like what you saw In a fit of rage you tore the mirror from the wall In a desperate attempt to hide your horrid face You fashioned an all-purpose mask to cancel your disgrace You ran from the truth thinking no one would see In all truth you are still the same person to me I saw the face that you wanted to hide I know the true person you are inside No matter what you look like or what you do There will never be a change in how I treat you With all of you effort to change what they see Who you are inside is all that ever means anything to me

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 4.67 weighted 4.96 rank 8582 views 179 View voting details →

3 votes so far. Yours would make 4.3 votes so far

3 comments

[n/a] ALChemy 26-Nov-05/11:12 AM Reply
Did you notice every line in your poem is written as a seperate sentence. Caps at the beginning. MS Word?

You need to get personal. Say things that are unique to your situation or perspective. We have no idea who the hell you're talking to. A lover? A friend? A man? A woman? Michael Jackson? Who?
Don't try to write a poem for everyone. If you do it will always turn out the same way. Hokey.
[6] wilco › ALChemy 26-Nov-05/8:32 PM Reply
yep
[8] zodiac 27-Nov-05/6:06 AM Reply
Yeah, you have to wonder if you're really going to be able to convey your feelings and experiences and make an accurate account of your life and times if you can only write 13-syllable sentences...