Re: Pebbles by Verse2Verse	4-Oct-05/8:27 PM
Some good stuff here, but trim it a little.
Re: hide and seek by oneglove	4-Oct-05/8:35 PM
not bad.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-05/8:38 PM
Keep the first three stanzas, changing the last line of the third. Keep the last two stanzas, but change the made you up line. Then you might just have something.
Re: Keep on Going by april fool	11-Oct-05/8:29 PM
ok, will do. So, now take this advice and write yourself another poem.
Re: Skyline by MacFrantic	11-Oct-05/8:41 PM
Not bad, guy, but I think it's a little long....
Re: untitled rhyme royal 3 by starkfister	13-Oct-05/12:58 PM
I want to give this a three but for some reason I like it....
Re: Take heart, you are closer than you know by Bobjim	13-Oct-05/1:07 PM
I love the title. I don't like the poem, but I love the title.
Re: Brethren, oblivion is not the road to the city Ataraxis. by SupremeDreamer	13-Oct-05/1:13 PM
Hey, haven't seen you in a while dreamersupremer. On the subject of this poem..it's just too damn long and there's just not enough interesting here to necessitate it being that long (I started wishing for Cliff's Notes). It's good and I almst gave a 9 but it needs to be shortended.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Oct-05/1:28 PM
Zodiac said this pretty well already, but what the hell: You've got to get a grip on your life, girl. Let's grow up here and stop falling in love with every meat headed fuck that walks by your door. Go see Dr. Phil or something (the Poemranker is cheaper therapy, but I don't think it's working). You could be a good writer, but everything you write is just third grade diary entries about why the boy next door doesn't like her. Now, sure, most songs are about love, most poems are about love, but make it interesting. It's gotten to the point where people know exactly what your poem says before they even click on it. Follow Zodiac's advice: grow up, use your education and either stop being crazy over every guy you meet or start munching box (but you'll find that women are infinitely more confusing than men could ever hope to be). P.S. - The only reason you're not good enough for whoever you keep writing about is that you act (if your poems are any indication) like you're completely batshit.
Re: Incommunicado blues (fixed, except for Dovina) by zodiac	24-Oct-05/6:57 PM
The falling into religion part is great and I rather like the -ly
Re: Eternity by Dovina	24-Oct-05/7:25 PM
I think you should have stopped after the location line and it would've been pretty okay, but I think the last half kills it.
Re: untitled rubiayait 2 by starkfister	24-Oct-05/7:54 PM
whut?
Re: Ruins by Caducus	24-Oct-05/8:10 PM
Not the best I've seen from you..
Re: Intimate Joy by flightoffancy	25-Oct-05/7:17 PM
The uncrossable void line doesn't really work
Re: MOMENTS From A Madman's Mind by PsydewaysTears	25-Oct-05/7:21 PM
The third stanza is just not very good, but the rest isnt too bad...not real wild about the capitalized words either...I'm guessing you did it because they all have to do with time, but it's actually kind of distracting.
Re: The cold shoulder by <~>	26-Oct-05/2:20 PM
constellation sex..
Re: Tough Love by Crann Mascher	26-Oct-05/4:06 PM
Sounds like a Ween song off the 12 Golden Country Greats album....nice
Re: brave new world still a bit timid by FreeFormFixation	30-Oct-05/4:00 PM
Although I think you're completely misinterpreting Jeff Mangum's lyrics, there are still parts of this that I like (such as the third stanza). Also, points for knowing who Neutral Milk Hotel is...
Re: The mountain has come to Mohammed by ALChemy	24-Nov-05/5:50 PM
Sympathy for the Devil reference...nice..
Re: Low by wilco	26-Nov-05/10:08 PM
Just for the record, I absolutely fucking hate this...it's cheezy and cliche...there are a few things I like about it, though..it's something of an experiment.