Re: Few Too Little by talking_goldfish	19-Aug-02/6:30 PM
Nice idea, and executed with a dab of panache. 7. The ending's a little wishy-washy, but as a whole, there's still something there to interest the reader.
Re: The Word by Tascobar	19-Aug-02/6:19 PM
A quality poem, Tascobar. 8. I particularly like the form you have chosen; the short sentences indicate a stunted thought process, which is what I presume you are partly alluding to in your piece. Jolly good show, old bean.
Re: the toxic noise by fleshpedler	19-Aug-02/6:07 PM
Heavy stuff. 6. A couple of the later, longer verses are a tad clumsy, but there's some good imagery and ideas. 'the wet cement of incision drip' is a really nice line.
Re: uh oh by evergreen	19-Aug-02/6:04 PM
Nice. 7. Simple and to the point. A predictable ending, but a pleasant enough ditty nevertheless.
Re: The Ultimate~Creep goes to Mecca! by Bachus	19-Aug-02/5:25 PM
An absolute stinker. 0. My good man, the scenes you describe are those of a terrible, low-budget movie. Terribly bad, far, far too long and a bore to read. I didn't think it possible, but the poem is actually worse at the end than it is at the beginning. This poem failed to excite, to shock or even to actually move me to any emotion, other than to screw my face up in disdain. Poor sir, very poor.
Re: My Angel by emilys369	19-Aug-02/5:13 PM
Sweet stuff. 7. Written with a child-like innocence, this is nice. This could still certainly be found in greeting cards, but at least they wouldn't be naff ones.
Re: As I sit by hamgurl	19-Aug-02/5:05 PM
I have vomit all over me thanks to this. 0. The kind of rot found in only the very worst greeting cards. For the final two lines alone you should be punished by hard labour. Disgusting. It's made even worse by the poem initially disguising itself as a quite possibly half-decent philosophical little ditty, before regressing into the slush from Hell.
Re: Another Window by nightii	19-Aug-02/4:59 PM
On first reading this I dismissed it as the kind of sloppy, sentimental tosh that really builds up a rage in me, but then on reading it again I changed my mind. An interesting take on the world of internet chatrooms? Good final line with reference to the start of the poem. Have 7, Sir.
Re: Untitled # 112 by nightii	19-Aug-02/4:55 PM
Grim. 7. The content is slightly disconcerting, but the fact that you've created such a graphic image with so few words is a skill indeed.
Re: Retrospect by hmph	19-Aug-02/4:49 PM
Far too preachy. 3. The repetition of 'back in the days' throughout the poem shows a lack of imagination, and coming to think about it, so does the poem in it's entitity. A bore from start to finish. This poem tells me nothing.
Re: Expeditions by Nicholas Jones	19-Aug-02/4:45 PM
Very nice. 8. I like the detail and the narrative tone.
Re: Two Eagles by Frass	19-Aug-02/2:52 PM
Nicely done. 7. 'Keybored' is a great line. Some lovely imagery.
Re: Selective Alopecia by Ming T. Merciless	19-Aug-02/2:29 PM
A delightful first poem Ming. 8. The contrast between the simple yet effective words of the poem and the more educated title is inspired stuff.
Re: Mellow by frostygirl	19-Aug-02/2:13 PM
Nice. 7. The first verse is a cracker, and the feelings of melancholy and resignation are carried well throughout the poem. I like this, and I'm not usually a fan of sentimental slop.
Re: devil by pitchblackdisaster	19-Aug-02/2:10 PM
This has no merit at all. 0. The language is dull and unimaginative, and to have the final line in caps simply highlights how hard the poem must work in order to grab the reader's attention before it thankfully ends. I'm afraid there are no positives to mention, aside from the fact that it is mercifully short.
Re: Snow by no9schmack	19-Aug-02/2:02 PM
Very average. 6. It's actually written rather well in my opinion, but I think that the major problem is the subject matter; I don't think anybody could write a love poem about snow without the overriding smell of naffness and cheese rising through the house.
Re: Devil, BEWARE!!! by gay	19-Aug-02/1:42 PM
Should this be sung to the theme music of Mighty Mouse? It's certainly bad enough. 2. Sir, in submitting material such as this, I can only conclude that you are an egomaniac, a total prat, or more than likely, both.
Re: The Big Push by Tascobar	19-Aug-02/1:37 PM
A very successful Haiku. 8. A delightful choice of words make the 'bog' standard subject matter rise above the 'crap'. Vivid and concise, with a beautiful summation to close.
Re: Just Another Day by dougsoderstrom	19-Aug-02/1:31 PM
Not bad at all. 7. The start to the piece is very good, as is the final third. I'd have personally worked on the middle section a little more; the stanza's seem much more laboured than in other parts of the poem. However, I feel I'm nitpicking now, and so will cease my criticisms. In general, very good. I think the line 'Break fast' is lovely.
Re: Sunflowers for Natalie by mrfiend	16-Aug-02/8:32 PM
Sir, you are deranged. 0. This is scary stuff, and I do believe that the authorities that miss your presence in their institutions need to be notified.