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Another Window (Free verse) by nightii Windows open
to the outside world.
Talking, flirting
sharing your soul
with strangers,
ten thousand miles away.
Faces unknown,
voices unheard.
Always there,
always aware,
waiting for a word,
closer than loved ones,
best friends,
until -
Another window opens...
Up the ladder:
love: siamese verse 1
Down the ladder:
The Darkness of Eternity
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.1666665
Posted: August 12, 2002 12:55 PM PDT; Last modified: August 12, 2002 12:55 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0448236 Overall Rank: 6973 Comments:
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Tarquin De La Bog @ 213.1.45.14
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19-Aug-02/4:59 PM
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On first reading this I dismissed it as the kind of sloppy, sentimental tosh that really builds up a rage in me, but then on reading it again I changed my mind. An interesting take on the world of internet chatrooms? Good final line with reference to the start of the poem. Have 7, Sir.
I agree, this is pleasingly sardonic.
Strikes an all-too-familiar chord in me.
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