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uh oh (Free verse) by evergreen i awoke with aching head
tried to focus on my bed
and i see to my surprise
another pair of bleary eyes
i almost moaned
i almost cried
to see a pair of smeary eyes
then i wonder
maybe in vain
what the hell is your first name?
Up the ladder:
Thornwood (Splinters)
Down the ladder:
Horseflies and Mayflies, Incessant Today
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Posted: July 14, 2002 8:47 AM PDT; Last modified: July 14, 2002 8:47 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.670137 Overall Rank: 2065 Comments:
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pkdrunner @ 64.229.7.247
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14-Jul-02/12:22 PM
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Excellent! At least there was only one other pair of eyes :)
Yeah LOL! nice 1! It's so cool to get drunk! Woiiiiiii beer! Nice one lads!
Now right a version from their perspective...here allow me in haiku for you....With beer goggles on/I scraped the barrels bottom/There's your barking gash!
Nice. 7. Simple and to the point. A predictable ending, but a pleasant enough ditty nevertheless.
thank you for pointing that out,I hadn't relized that I left the 's' out of the title
Heek!
Joe black.
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