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Horseflies and Mayflies, Incessant Today (Free verse) by Christof The priest's bay mare in the stable block
Is distant; the beating of the clock
Marks out the months in longshanked stride
Since the Father died.
And now the new priest comes by car
And brings the curate to bless the scar
That marks the spot of the jagged chip
That cleaves my hip.
It isn't much to miss, but still
The horse's hooves in their four-square drill
Fought the rule of the fragile priest
So I thought of peace
But the horseflies and mayflies are incessant today
With nothing resisting the buzz of their play.
Up the ladder:
uh oh
Down the ladder:
Z higher of arts
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Posted: August 27, 2002 6:44 AM PDT; Last modified: August 27, 2002 6:44 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.670137 Overall Rank: 2066 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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god'swife @ 209.179.137.176
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27-Aug-02/10:19 AM
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You've got a natural classic style. I picture a stable-hand, fond of his master, who lost his spritual guidance and his job all in one blow. More of that erotic tension found in "the red shoes". The mare scarred him but he loves and misses her. Because she is strong and potentionally dangerous, but willing to please. There's a beauty beyond telling in that. To tame a gorgeous beast, be able to stand near it, and befriend it is thrilling. Lines 11 & 12 are my favorites, but I can't aticulate why. Ends well, with the insects accentuating his void.
Grendal, eats to fuck the mares. resistance is fathomless. be blessed. 7/10!
Wow, this is a really moving piece. You really have a knack for telling big stories using the fewest possible words - the true beauty of poetry. 10/10
This poem makes me happy. I built a whole world around it. This and Butcher are my favorites. I hope your girl appreciates your poetry. I off to enlightened the masses. Today we're talking about violencia domestica. Have a lovely evening.
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