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Retrospect (Free verse) by hmph Back in the days of painful epitomes
And waned promises
Back in the days of mindless, elementary corruption
We still managed
To find ourselves
Back in the days of unsung glory
And impossible dreams
Back in the days of constant repression
We still managed
To find a light
Back in the days of unrighteousness
And temporary delusions
Back in the days of misplaced primarities
We still managed
To hold on
Up the ladder:
untitled
Down the ladder:
A box floating high in the skies
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Posted: August 8, 2002 12:18 AM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2002 12:18 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.9523187 Overall Rank: 8913 Comments:
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Tarquin De La Bog @ 213.1.45.14
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19-Aug-02/4:49 PM
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Far too preachy. 3. The repetition of 'back in the days' throughout the poem shows a lack of imagination, and coming to think about it, so does the poem in it's entitity. A bore from start to finish. This poem tells me nothing.
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