Re: Wondering by anagram	16-Aug-02/8:29 PM
This has incensed me. 2. A quite frankly dire effort. Your rhyming is poor and there is nothing in the content of the poem that interests me in the slightest. You should be ashamed.
Re: I never Knew..... by SkateBoardGurl5799	14-Aug-02/6:05 PM
This is awful. 2. The structure is nice but it is far too long and in need of a larger vocabulary.
Re: When the wheels stop turning. by The troubled sinner	14-Aug-02/5:58 PM
Sometimes a poem can make me get off the wheel of life for a time and take a moment. 8. This poem did. Lovely stuff, with a truly optimistic ending.
Re: autumn gold by lexicon	14-Aug-02/5:52 PM
Autumn gold is a lovely image and the first quarter of the poem is blissfully peaceful, but then it seriously declines in quality. 4. This is a waste. I'm upset.
Re: Valley of the Dolls by anagram	14-Aug-02/5:50 PM
Good title and final line. 7. Your rhyming is far from quality, but the poem as a whole is likeable.
Re: Memories by DevilTmptrss	14-Aug-02/5:44 PM
Woeful. 1. For the verse 'But he's still here inside my head, he won't leave even though he's dead' you should be executed for the good of humanity. You only score for the almost reasonable opening gambit to this monstrosity.
Re: Going to River Phoenix in my mind by horus8	14-Aug-02/5:39 PM
This suffers from trying too hard. 4. A poor opening is redeemed midway through the poem, only to come to a crashing and horribly messy end. I think you're confused as to how to write this one.
Re: A mountain song by kawakurdi	14-Aug-02/5:26 PM
Are you a tits man, by any chance? Softporn pleasure written for your own gratification. 0. Terrible stuff. Please don't inflict this bile onto anybody anymore. Redeeming features? None. Simply the image of a tit.
Re: ? by Nimrod's son	14-Aug-02/5:22 PM
Sorry, but I fail to see this working on any level. 2. Poor.
Re: Love Obsession (the stalker's song) by evergreen	14-Aug-02/5:09 PM
Nice. 7. One of the few lyrics I've read which hasn't made me think of dire thrash-metal eighties bands. Good work son.
Re: In a Single Moment by mozac	14-Aug-02/5:06 PM
Crap. 2. You want to take heed of the last two lines of your poem sir. Wake up, and then try to write something which isn't so utterly dismal.
Re: Sunday night is Curry night by ==Doylum	14-Aug-02/5:04 PM
Great stuff. 9. 'Quick escape ye to the bog' is sheer quality.
Re: The silent lecture(secret names) by horus8	14-Aug-02/4:56 PM
Jesus! You score high on this, if not only for length! 7. As a lyric this song must be a concerto by itself. Ultimately however, you loose the overall impact of the piece by writing verses which vary in quality to a huge degree. From the good, to the downright stinky.
Re: A piece i shall never play again by ==Doylum	14-Aug-02/4:51 PM
Not bad. 6. A nice ending, to what otherwise was a disappointing piece.
Re: Exquisite Explosion by Venus	14-Aug-02/4:50 PM
I like this. 7. The use of language is well chosen and expressive. A nice poem.
Re: A little part by savannah	14-Aug-02/4:42 PM
This is tosh. 0. The first two lines are really good, but at the end the poem reads like a terribly cliched greeting card. Awful stuff.
Re: Strange but true by ==Doylum	14-Aug-02/4:39 PM
10. Words are inadequate to describe this brilliance.
Re: Wife beater t-shirt by bondjedi	14-Aug-02/4:32 PM
Wow! I laughed till I cried. 10. It's funny but profound. The title is absolute genius, and the Haiku does not fail to live up to it.
Re: My Tolkien Fantasty by ==Doylum	14-Aug-02/4:27 PM
The title is inspired. 9. A very worthy Haiku.
Re: Alone by Lil_Chick_512	14-Aug-02/4:26 PM
This is basic, yet fantastic. 10. The best piece of work I've read on this site.