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Valley of the Dolls (Free verse) by anagram Burning passion has melted away
From love's confusion and lust's decay
The cry has left and lost it's need
No more the want for sex to feed
Comparing days with times gone by
Lays trust and devotion down to die
If they can't match what's not for you
Then feelings fade to a friend untrue
When buddies turn out of love
And nudging now needs a shove
The time has come to let it go
It's clear to see for those who know
But just when I need help to see
At long last something's there for me
And all the effort tumbles and falls
Into the valley of the dolls.
Up the ladder:
my cat
Down the ladder:
your voice soothes me in the dark
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.4444447
Posted: August 14, 2002 1:43 PM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2002 1:43 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.7222223 Overall Rank: 1879 Comments:
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Bachus @ 24.126.113.154
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14-Aug-02/3:01 PM
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This is quick, and to the point. Perfectly metered, and drains you just right at the end. "The valley of the dolls" is vindictively tantalizing.
Good title and final line. 7. Your rhyming is far from quality, but the poem as a whole is likeable.
Anagram:
Thanks again for your comment concerning. Being a beginner poet (at least as far as publishing goes), I need all of the esteem building I can get. Your friend, Doug PS I wish that there were more seem to appreciate "how my mind works." Thanks again Doug By the way I gave this poem a 9. It sure does make a lot of sense-----and so many things do eventually come to an end. Learning how to let go is necessarily an important part of life. Not easy, but sometimes just simply necessary.
Anagram,
Thanks for the kind words. I've modified "Just Another Day." What do you think? Doug 205 view(s)
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