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Valley of the Dolls (Free verse) by anagram

Burning passion has melted away From love's confusion and lust's decay The cry has left and lost it's need No more the want for sex to feed Comparing days with times gone by Lays trust and devotion down to die If they can't match what's not for you Then feelings fade to a friend untrue When buddies turn out of love And nudging now needs a shove The time has come to let it go It's clear to see for those who know But just when I need help to see At long last something's there for me And all the effort tumbles and falls Into the valley of the dolls.

Tarquin De La Bog 14-Aug-02/5:50 PM
Good title and final line. 7. Your rhyming is far from quality, but the poem as a whole is likeable.




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