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Wondering (Free verse) by anagram How far away does one belong?
How wide is the gulf between right and wrong?
How far does love stretch careless of hate?
Could it be tomorrow - turning up late?
And where does one go,when the venue's not there?
And do we return to our homelands elsewhere?
And have we a life yet to be seen?
And is tomorrow yesterday,that's ours unforeseen?
Or do we perceive a line that's so bent?
Or do we believe that we're all heaven sent?
Or do we accept that when our time's through?
We'll all play the harp,on clouds - out of view.
CSN 3/85.
Up the ladder:
The Things I love and Elempty
Down the ladder:
I'm Sorry
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Posted: August 15, 2002 4:14 PM PDT; Last modified: August 15, 2002 4:14 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.2689414 Overall Rank: 3861 Comments:
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Tarquin De La Bog @ 213.1.45.14
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16-Aug-02/8:29 PM
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This has incensed me. 2. A quite frankly dire effort. Your rhyming is poor and there is nothing in the content of the poem that interests me in the slightest. You should be ashamed.
So sorry to have to have inspired such ire Tarq. (hope you don't mind me calling you Tarq.).That is twice you have had a go at my rhyming ability without explaining the reason for your low opinion.Please expand,I would be grateful. I have read 1 or 2 of yours which were open verse, do you just dislike true poetry that rhymes or can you not catch on to the cadence.
Looking at poetry only as "true poetry that rhymes" seems to narrow the scope.
i really was looking for any reason to pull out my kale gun on this one.....but the last three sentences...made me think saturday morning cartoon symbolic brain washing at it's finest. jung would have grinned briefly...briefly.
This is pretty good, and I enjoied reading it. I hope you find the answers you are looking for
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