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Exquisite Explosion (Free verse) by Venus
Clothed in my sucker suit today I wait for you and your clockwork cloudburst With atypical authority you pine under an aquamarine architrave waiting to shower me with condensed milk confetti then comes the exquisite explosion.

Up the ladder: Deck's Tavern
Down the ladder: Australian Red

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3
Weighted score: 5.15
Overall Rank: 5219
Posted: August 8, 2002 9:49 PM PDT; Last modified: August 8, 2002 9:49 PM PDT
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[8] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 9-Aug-02/1:14 AM | Reply
Exquisitet
[7] Tarquin De La Bog @ 62.7.134.133 | 14-Aug-02/4:50 PM | Reply
I like this. 7. The use of language is well chosen and expressive. A nice poem.
[8] [mojo] @ 195.92.194.19 | 16-Aug-02/2:56 PM | Reply
I don't know why i like this but i do. Probably the aquamarine architrave. Good word choice. I read this as a coming thunderstorm. (But may be wrong).8.
[n/a] Venus @ | 16-Aug-02/3:24 PM | Reply
A coming thunderstorm will work if you like, but think of it on a more erotic level...
[8] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 16-Aug-02/4:16 PM | Reply
Oh shite. Now I'm really splitting in two. Hah! LOL! Odoylum's jewels!
[8] waltfreakinwhitman @ 192.193.210.27 | 20-Aug-02/11:27 AM | Reply
Nice alliteration. Did you have to discard 'creamy custard' or 'manly molasses' before arriving at 'condensed milk confetti'?
[n/a] Venus @ | 20-Aug-02/12:55 PM | Reply
May I steal those? Always on the hunt for functioning alliterations, dontcha know.
[7] shwenatjadeflower @ 68.12.149.5 | 25-Aug-02/12:59 PM | Reply
This is funny as well as sexy...nice work. :) ~Jade
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