Re: Shelter by poetandknowit	20-Aug-02/11:34 PM
Well folks, another toilet is flushed in Ohio. Yes, there is something about the girls back there. Just ask babbit. I applaud the mothering skills and have a newfound, yes my hand is over my heart and I am going to recite the pledge right now, come on every one, let' s join hands, for my fellow Americans. I can't wait until my daughter is old enough for me to buy her cigs. Then we can share a crack pipe and do lines together. Oh I love this country.
Re: Shelter by poetandknowit	20-Aug-02/11:18 PM
I am sorry, I quite enjoy a little critic, but could you possibly write in fucking English. What the hell is shiznit? and kewl? B4u? Jesus, you are raping the mother tongue, you fascist. How dare you write patriot poems! I am telling your mother. And go to fucking bed!
Re: The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	20-Aug-02/10:28 PM
Don't you have school tomorrow? Go to bed. Quit sneaking around all pissed off because no one likes your poem. Don't you get it. When you run to this guy's poem and yap at him, you lose. That is what he wants you to do. You know like a mouse to a trap. So just suck it up and move on to posting your next poem. Most writers rely on more than one prize winning poem to carry them.
Re: Farewell Song by jaalko	20-Aug-02/3:26 PM
Wasn't this already written? There is one thing to put it into an allusion, but this is down right theft - my love is a red, red rose.
Re: The First Proper Evening of Summer by [mojo]	20-Aug-02/3:23 PM
Awesome title, but the poem doesn't do it one bit of justice. .
Re: breathtaking by j_beckfield	20-Aug-02/3:07 PM
Yes, you are fool making with this poetic ditty.
Re: I am Darkness by Dreamer	20-Aug-02/2:04 PM
Does darkness really echo? Shirvering fear, chilling words in ear. How can it be fatal. It s always dark somewhere. Should be a poem about moving on. But this just sucks.
Re: poetry by nrevatehtni	20-Aug-02/11:49 AM
Oh God another poem about how the muse struck while sitting one day on the toilet.
Re: will you? by Sapphire	20-Aug-02/11:39 AM
That is some serious rhyming.
Re: Creative Destruction by talking_goldfish	20-Aug-02/11:36 AM
This is quite the weak poem filled with cliched language, images and ideas. With lines like "you make the world seem so glad" just kill the poem. I'd like to buy the world some coke.....la de da.
Re: Our New Tongue by Christof	20-Aug-02/11:24 AM
Quite the good poem. The repetition works well, but I think the second stanza is calling out for a bit of work.
Re: Give me beer! by Agemo-Z	19-Aug-02/11:27 PM
I am quite fond of beer, but not this little ditty.
Re: American Haiku 2 by memorybabe	19-Aug-02/11:08 PM
I am by no mean an expert of this form, but I alway thought the syllables were different, or is that the point with the American Haiku. Moreover, why disgrace the putrid cow town of Des Moines with the misspell? Explain the motives because the piece does not.
Re: would i be considered crazy by silvertongueddevil	19-Aug-02/10:35 PM
Good stuff. I don't like the word "sustenance," but what the hell, it barely takes anything away from the poem.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/7:10 PM
Sorry, she deleted all of her shit before I could post what I wanted to say. I could not waste it so I posted it here. It was to the Shewolf writer of the save the kitty poems.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/7:01 PM
Thorns is not shallow. Maybe misguided, but not shallow! I have explained away the other stuff to death, so I do not want to waste space. The are tidbits of a longer work that quite frankly is rubbish.
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/6:59 PM
And just to show exactly how mature you are, you go through each of your critics' poems and put a 0 there, which is funny, because we are after the comments and not the votes. Does that make sense? We like the banter. So putting a 0 there when you didn't even read the fucking poem just shows your ignorance and immaturity. Did you tell your mother on us? Go back into all of our poems and leave a comment regarding the poem. Say something to us. We love the banter. Or at least I do, I cannot speak for the others. And THEN YOU PULL OFF YOUR POEMS!!! IS THAT HOW WE PAY? By Getting Rid Of You!!!!
Re: Ambiguous Love Poem For A Girl I Once Knew by poetandknowit	19-Aug-02/6:55 PM
But I am good. And I'm cute on top it.
Re: Posing A 'mission (A Haiku Triad) by gay	19-Aug-02/6:47 PM
Alter egos abound!! Is there a purpose behind this shit?
Re: Black Buns by Bachus	19-Aug-02/12:50 PM
Neal, yes, Neal Cassady! East High School Graduate. Swept floors at May D&F. Drank at My Brother's Bar, hung with the homeless in Civic Center Park. Yes, Neal. Where the fuck did I get Nick so early in the morn.