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The Precious Thing (Free verse) by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. The sly beggar
slips his hand into
the urinal
and, fingers dr
i
p
p
ing, retrieves
the
mint.
Up the ladder:
Not right now
Down the ladder:
Incomplete
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 6.84
Posted: August 20, 2002 5:56 PM PDT; Last modified: August 20, 2002 6:02 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.8276854 Overall Rank: 349 Comments:
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Lenore @ 64.252.100.33
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20-Aug-02/8:20 PM
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Always with the soft white under-belly, someone's got to do it.
I give you phlegm hockers shite on this site; but, this I like. It falls loosely into the category of social commentary.
OH yeah! That was the best thing ive ever seen! Bravo BRavo! BRAVO! give it a fucking standing ovation.. u say my poem sucks at least it makes sense all of urs are pointless.. and have no meaning.. u need to stop pretending.. at least i dont go around this site swingin my balls like im the best..
Don't you have school tomorrow? Go to bed. Quit sneaking around all pissed off because no one likes your poem. Don't you get it. When you run to this guy's poem and yap at him, you lose. That is what he wants you to do. You know like a mouse to a trap. So just suck it up and move on to posting your next poem. Most writers rely on more than one prize winning poem to carry them.
you sly beggar. slipping it in, once again, and freshness counts! jubilant use of 'shape', and motion.
Bizarrely, I find this quite moving as well as funny.
Hits all the right angles, and then dangles, just so. 7/10
Very good 7.
lmao nice!
two dr
i p p ing thumbs up! -10-
yeah that didn't work
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