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16-Oct-02/4:20 AM |
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Impressive. I approve of the element of self-doubt in the final line. 7. One question - are the Waffle's powers quelled by consuming the Findus Crispy Pancake of Doom? I must know!
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| Re: Devotion by Tyriana |
16-Oct-02/4:35 AM |
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Hmmm. Not bad, although it's already been done several thousand times before. This would be far better if more emotion was evoked - not easy, but that's what makes a great haiku. Have a 4.
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| Re: glue by chinstrap |
23-Oct-02/8:26 AM |
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23-Oct-02/8:41 AM |
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Had you posted the last one alone, a 7 beckoned. as it is, 3. Immature poetry has it's place - but it should at least amuse.
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23-Oct-02/8:47 AM |
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Good ending. 7. I needed a chuckle.
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| Re: Coloured waifs home by horus8 |
24-Oct-02/4:32 AM |
Not what I expected from the (misspelt) title, but a well pieced haiku nevertheless. Take this 7, and use it well.
And yes, I am a pedant.
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24-Oct-02/4:39 AM |
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I bet you thought this was a good haiku when you penned it. Sadly, you were wrong as wrong can be. A pointless piece. 1. Pap.
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| Re: wax by New Life Drug |
28-Oct-02/4:20 AM |
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Strange - this doesn't make any kind of sense whatsoever. Would indeed be better for the loss of the last line. 3.
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| Re: Missing You by psychedelic |
28-Oct-02/4:21 AM |
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I don't think the last line works, unfortunately. Would have been a good haiku otherwise. Ho hum, such is life..... 4.
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28-Oct-02/4:28 AM |
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This is everything a haiku should avoid - dull, uninspiring, provoking no thought whatsoever - and on a dead horse of a subject which people obviously never tire of flogging. Have a 0 for this weak effort.
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28-Oct-02/4:35 AM |
A woman scorned and all that....
I remember the Game of Life board game from my younger days - it was dull, uninspiring and tired - just like this poem. 2.
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| Re: Beer by Yardbird |
29-Oct-02/8:43 AM |
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| Re: The Black Hearted Sunflower by anitawit |
29-Oct-02/8:44 AM |
Sorry, I'm a purist. Not a bad poem in itself, but an abhorrent haiku. Have a 0 and learn to OBEY THE RULES!!!!!!!
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| Re: Howl For Clarity (for Jeff Buckley) by Bachus |
30-Oct-02/3:22 AM |
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A good effort. 7. Can't fault any kind of tribute to the late great Jeff Buckley. Bravo!
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| Re: Morning Glory by waltfreakinwhitman |
30-Oct-02/3:33 AM |
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A truthful account of many, many mornings. 7. I shall assume that most of the "low voters" are female.
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| Re: I remenber by little_angel_maria |
7-Nov-02/5:16 AM |
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Rubbish. 0. If your Dad "holves" you, it sounds as though he should be reported to the relevant authorities. Jesus, your poems' ratings are beginning to resemble binary code.
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| Re: boy girl by little_angel_maria |
7-Nov-02/5:39 AM |
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One of your better efforts. 3.
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| Re: Die by little_angel_maria |
7-Nov-02/8:27 AM |
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The poem gets an 8. Sadly, you get a 0, as I have read a poem bizarrely similar to this before. Sorry, but no points for plagiarism!!!!
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| Re: Necromantic Boo-boo by razorgrin |
8-Nov-02/7:59 AM |
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An unfortunate error of judgement, but a decent haiku. 7.
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8-Nov-02/8:32 AM |
I agree with Tintagiles (for once).
0 for the haiku, 8 for the sentiments expressed. But still a 0.
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