Hmmm. Not bad, although it's already been done several thousand times before. This would be far better if more emotion was evoked - not easy, but that's what makes a great haiku. Have a 4.
thanks, tabasco. It's religious, not romantic.what do you want, kissy-face slush? The devotion is for Tlaloc or Tezcatlipoca, not a boy. Have a finger.
How would anyone get from this haiku that it's about a god? I think you have to expect people to read their own interpretations into this and not get annoyed if they do.
Granted, it's a little obscure. I myself like the idea of using inter-human love as a metaphor for religious devotion. The Aztec faith isn't exactly common anymore, so I do understand the fact that it's not that easy to make the connection. As for tabasco, I only responded rudely to a rude and uninformed comment.
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And I stick by my comments. Like it or lump it.
Having said that, looking at my own ratings it appears that you've chosen to lump it....
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