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Devotion (Haiku) by Tyriana

Kneeling over him, his torn-out heart in my hands. Love's a sacrifice.

Tascobar 16-Oct-02/4:35 AM
Hmmm. Not bad, although it's already been done several thousand times before. This would be far better if more emotion was evoked - not easy, but that's what makes a great haiku. Have a 4.




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