Missing You

Member since 2002 · Posted 27 Oct 2002 · 6 comments

The night sighs your name The day echoes your laughter... I can't help but hear.

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20 votes so far. Yours would make 21.20 votes so far

[8] eviltwin 27-Oct-02/4:30 PM Reply

i like the emotion of this poem. the last line doesn't sound quite right to me, though. try taking another look at it.

[4] Tascobar 28-Oct-02/4:21 AM Reply

I don't think the last line works, unfortunately. Would have been a good haiku otherwise. Ho hum, such is life..... 4.

[8] <~> 28-Oct-02/7:20 AM Reply

the last line disappoints. the first 2 are setting us up...take us somewhere.

[8] Christof 28-Oct-02/7:28 AM Reply

I don't know, I actually quite like the last line. Puts you succinctly into the situation.

[n/a] psychedelic › Christof 29-Oct-02/5:14 AM Reply

Thanks, guys. I'll think about it.

[7] Quarton 4-Jan-03/8:07 AM Reply

Nice. I like the simplicity and the
metaphors.