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The Black Hearted Sunflower (Haiku) by anitawit The black- hearted sunflower
Is kin to the sun
Even though it carries about
Darkness in its heart
Up the ladder:
making progress (a piece of it)
Down the ladder:
Horus8 Vs. Book Learning
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Posted: October 28, 2002 9:41 PM PST; Last modified: October 28, 2002 9:41 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.7272725 Overall Rank: 11846 Comments:
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INTRANSIT @ 216.137.194.232
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29-Oct-02/2:38 AM
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Not quite a haiku but excellent content.
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anitawit @ 203.197.210.131
> INTRANSIT
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10-Nov-02/9:52 PM
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Thanks (I wanted to say this before, I'm late). I've learnt since what a haiku is technically.
Sorry, I'm a purist. Not a bad poem in itself, but an abhorrent haiku. Have a 0 and learn to OBEY THE RULES!!!!!!!
Though I can be a pedantic purist, in this case, I simply don't find it a very good poem, haiku or not.
I thought you said "tartness in its fart". i appologies.t
Please excuse Tascobar's comment. He is a robot we built to selflessly suck cocks but somehow he became self-aware.
great concept, but redundant. you essentially say the same thing twice.
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