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Die (Free verse) by little_angel_maria
You just left me now, oh why? The room oh so cold, oh why? I feel so scared without you, can't you see in need you, Oh why did you have to die? Oh you just left me here, here i am lying lonely on the bed, where we played games, where you kissed me and made love to me. Oh here I am not knowing what to do, staring at our picture up there on the wall, it seems like it was just yesterday when you came home and asked me to marry you. Oh here I am missing you, please come back home, I love you, I swear to god I love you, Oh why did you have to die.

Up the ladder: Just the Way
Down the ladder: Aries, the God of war

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.7058823
Weighted score: 3.8601449
Overall Rank: 13462
Posted: October 21, 2002 10:18 AM PDT; Last modified: October 21, 2002 10:18 AM PDT
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 | 21-Oct-02/4:31 PM | Reply
And then, my friend, you die.

And then, my friend, you DIE, man!

beautiful. poetry at its finest.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 21-Oct-02/5:34 PM | Reply
burp.
[n/a] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 21-Oct-02/5:44 PM | Reply
have you been sleeping with the red power ranger again? hogging the kix? perhaps..the daughter of an admiral? you smell like poisoned carrion, even the vultures won't touch you...i fear your meat...has turned sweet. it's not so much the maggots spilling from your plastic surgery wounds, or the reek of north african garlic from your rectum, but more or less an down and dirty aura thing. sorry. dr. pepperstein says your bad for my chi...he also said you watch that tv show birds of prey, and that makes you very uninteresting...in very young latin pass me the rum and the vaccuum sort of way.
[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.211.12 | 21-Oct-02/6:33 PM | Reply
Is this about your father? It is so sad. I printed it out and showed all my girlfriends and at least two of them really cried because they could understand where u were coming from. Best poem yet on the ranker!! From the heart, p&k. 10
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.14 | 22-Oct-02/11:40 AM | Reply
This is why i enjoy entropy. eventually, everything dies.
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.79.35 > razorgrin | 27-Oct-02/11:59 AM | Reply
no not about my father and thank you poetandknowit
[0] Tascobar @ 193.130.87.54 | 7-Nov-02/8:27 AM | Reply
The poem gets an 8. Sadly, you get a 0, as I have read a poem bizarrely similar to this before. Sorry, but no points for plagiarism!!!!
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.183.222 > Tascobar | 7-Nov-02/9:19 AM | Reply
well just so you know this is original ok and if you read one maybe they copied me i dont do plagiarism ok!!!!
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.52 | 7-Nov-02/11:42 AM | Reply
ok, no. stop saying ok. kay? methinks the girlie doth protest too much...
[n/a] Amelia @ 198.146.135.219 | 11-Dec-02/12:39 PM | Reply
and as such giveth you fodder to muncheth on.
[n/a] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 11-Dec-02/6:51 PM | Reply
more contemporary prattle.
[10] cleverdevice @ 212.219.142.161 | 13-Jan-03/8:05 AM | Reply
Ten, yes.
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