Re: The Matrix by DespondentDotCom	22-Aug-02/3:31 PM
First, glad you called this one a freeform. Second, I'm enjoying your little film critique ditties, yes indeed, I like it. Third, I agree, The Matrix is a big gun wankathon for boys with little guns ; ) 7/10
Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus	22-Aug-02/3:21 PM
Without becoming overly literal here, I beg to differ. oops, looks like my dirty little secret's out... look what you've gone and made me do, god-woman-wife!!!
Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus	22-Aug-02/3:14 PM
This should clear things up: starfish is a cute little nickname for my... no, you're right DA, they should know what we know. But god-woman-wife, didn't I explain this to you already today?
Re: aphelion by DespondentDotCom	22-Aug-02/2:54 PM
Quit that cursed job and live again! Grow some balls and stop compromising, damn ye! Love the last bit. 7/10
Re: Hendrix by unknown	22-Aug-02/2:44 PM
I really do like the language, but at the same time feel it makes an enemy of the form. I especially like the ending, but I'm not quite loving it as a whole. 6/10
Re: haiku cycle 1 by mudskipper	22-Aug-02/2:39 PM
Very good, let's see some more. 7/10
Re: saving myself for marriage by Venus	22-Aug-02/2:36 PM
as long as it's not with your bad taco meat, beef-boy.
Re: The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	22-Aug-02/11:25 AM
Hits all the right angles, and then dangles, just so. 7/10
Re: Sunshine by alexander	22-Aug-02/11:13 AM
A great image, I can see it... can it see me? 8/10
Re: Hunny by Venus	22-Aug-02/10:59 AM
No, Alexander, I didn't kill him (in the literal sense anyway). And thank you so much for your kind offer to wrap yourself in my legs. I will give it some thought. I've been glancing through your work, and will certainly rank/comment as time permits today - like what I see so far ; )
Re: Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus	22-Aug-02/9:27 AM
And dude, that is hilarious. 7/10
Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus	22-Aug-02/9:23 AM
Thanks Christof, glad you liked. And no, P&T, you most certainly cannot watch!
Re: Hunny by Venus	21-Aug-02/9:40 PM
Thanks zin, nice to have a hit ;)
Re: IV (Deuteronomy's Lament) by coalcracker	21-Aug-02/8:08 PM
This is the funniest one I've read on this site! What happened to this guy? 7/10
Re: Hunny by Venus	21-Aug-02/4:53 PM
Praise is fine and dandy, but when it comes from the likes of my favorite poets in this house - and there are really only 10 or so - I become oh so very tickled pink! Christof - thank you for the comparison(?) to one of my favorite poets, and for your concern that Venus could possibly be neglected. No man should neglect a goddess. Babbit - any feedback from you is appreciated, as you are most certainly a Poetry God. Thank you for your praise. Regarding the suggestion, I looked at again and found that I am much too attached to the ending to change it. Please try it again in a few days. wife god woman - thank you for summing it up nicely ;)
Re: I DON'T SMILE ANYMORE by longships	21-Aug-02/11:33 AM
Your work is wrenching. Have you read any of Don Paterson's work? Much different in style but similar themes. 8/10
Re: Highgate Cemetery by longships	21-Aug-02/11:25 AM
This piece reminds me of the time I wandered the Cimetiere du Montparnasse in Paris at 4am. Not the neglect, as it is very well kept, but the feelings of peace and beckoning you impart. 7/10 for evoking a great memory.
Re: Exquisite Explosion by Venus	20-Aug-02/12:55 PM
May I steal those? Always on the hunt for functioning alliterations, dontcha know.
Re: Our New Tongue by Christof	20-Aug-02/11:51 AM
Maybe best not to answer those calls. I know, easier said than done. Nice work. 8/10
Re: you scare me like the rollercoaster by silvertongueddevil	19-Aug-02/11:32 PM
This manic, rambling style carries your obesession themes especially well. 7/10