| Re: a comment on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
29-Jul-04/6:11 PM |
Yeah, it's clearly missing the WIIFM factor.
The condemnation is coming from the good news/bad news doctor. Why? Because the central character is clearly at fault for the bad news - that his bones are like rubber. Whose bones? Why, the water dragon's bones, of course.
Geez, it's becoming cryptic even to me now!
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
29-Jul-04/4:37 PM |
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Thanks for the suggestions! Any advice on my latest submission...???
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| Re: Divorcing Tennessee by Dovina |
29-Jul-04/1:25 AM |
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You've captured the "spirit" of that mess perfectly.
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| Re: Respect on a Quiet Hillside by Dovina |
29-Jul-04/1:10 AM |
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Respect paid to the good life they lived - get it.
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| Re: Comfort Food by jessicazee |
29-Jul-04/12:32 AM |
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To be or to ravioli??!! Oh gosh darn, I love those food metaphors! Sweet stuff.
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| Re: The Annual January Thaw by Dovina |
29-Jul-04/12:21 AM |
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Yeah...you've captured city life...nice work
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| Re: a comment on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
28-Jul-04/11:24 AM |
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I hear you. But it's no riddle. An "afflicted" woman is hearing some news. She doesn't hear the whole message because her mind is busy trying to justify her potential guilt. Too shrouded perhaps?
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| Re: a comment on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
28-Jul-04/10:20 AM |
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I like to get a little feedback before explaining context, just to see if anyone can piece it together as-is. But feeling it is good too, yes?
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
28-Jul-04/9:27 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
28-Jul-04/8:30 AM |
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Thanks for the advice and rating!
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| Re: a comment on The bad news is his bones are like rubber by Venus |
28-Jul-04/7:51 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
28-Jul-04/7:47 AM |
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| Re: Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
27-Jul-04/7:54 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
27-Jul-04/11:40 AM |
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Thanks. I hear you on the shorter refrain. I'll play around with it a bit more.
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
27-Jul-04/11:38 AM |
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Thanks for the advice. I'm not really a lyrical sort, but I'll play with the form and repost.
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| Re: a comment on Gap-Fold vs. Sour Milk by Venus |
27-Jul-04/9:46 AM |
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Thanks. How do you think I could better set up the past and present?
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| Re: Zin/Enough/Things/Squeeze/Flow by gregsamsa222 |
26-Jul-04/12:58 AM |
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Glad I found this one - a big, fat 10.
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| Re: a comment on For you, I'd make meatloaf by Venus |
14-Feb-03/2:37 PM |
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Indeed, you are truly blessed. No oats. Breadcrumbs, and not the prepackaged sort. The preparation of food you are unwilling to eat is an intuitive process, as well. One must intuit what might make it exemplary, while remaining true to the classical version. Uh, what were we talking about again?
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| Re: a comment on For you, I'd make meatloaf by Venus |
14-Feb-03/2:06 PM |
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Have I already become so predictable?
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| Re: a comment on For you, I'd make meatloaf by Venus |
14-Feb-03/10:25 AM |
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I also hate meatloaf, won't touch it. That's the point. However, I am a fan of buffalo meat.
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