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For you, I'd make meatloaf (Free verse) by Venus
I can hardly remember now how all of this got started... Summer of 1999 you showed up at my door I was watching Westside Story when you invaded my world and you knew all of the words to "Maria" I remember wanting to touch you much to early on Seeing you across that garish green felt at Greenfield's I remember painting lipstick on your face for Halloween - Shit, I couldn't believe you were Raggedy Ann I remember that you freaked me out, leaving the bathroom door open, and your heart Open, Just enough room there for me to crawl inside And I recall us sharing a kitchen Working in tandem making those prosciutto panini's drinking each others House Cabs teaching you the intricacies of my Famous Caesar Salad It may have been there in that kitchen when I knew For you, I'd make meatloaf.

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.806824
Overall Rank: 1655
Posted: February 13, 2003 7:13 PM PST; Last modified: February 13, 2003 7:15 PM PST
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[10] razorgrin @ 142.166.250.207 | 13-Feb-03/9:00 PM | Reply
Clever. The use of food is brilliant. Food symbolism is wondrous.
[n/a] Venus @ 198.81.19.59 > razorgrin | 14-Feb-03/10:22 AM | Reply
I agree. Thanks!
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 14-Feb-03/10:17 AM | Reply
Yes, this is very good. GQT runner up. 9. only because i hate meatloaf... for some reason as a child i thught that it was buffalo meat.
[n/a] Venus @ 198.81.19.59 > horus8 | 14-Feb-03/10:25 AM | Reply
I also hate meatloaf, won't touch it. That's the point. However, I am a fan of buffalo meat.
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Venus | 14-Feb-03/11:38 AM | Reply
Would you believe that i knew you were going to say that? Because, i did. Ironically, now i'm a tiger shark now and will eat anything left half eaten in the fridge, but when i was a kid i was anemic out of finickiness? Life moves quick, and so do we.
[n/a] Venus @ 198.81.19.57 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 14-Feb-03/2:06 PM | Reply
Have I already become so predictable?
[8] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 14-Feb-03/2:23 PM | Reply
No, but since my grammar and spelling ability are pretty much in the shitter. God blessed me with uncanny intuitive nature, and a superman haircut, and nice ta ta's and smiggely wiggelys ala mode.. oh and i can get drunk and do full Gainors. but other than that i just knows things. like why the dust in my house wont stop screaming at me.. SHUTUP! damn you eternal floaty things... Do you put any oats in your loaf?
[n/a] Venus @ 198.81.19.57 > <{Baba^Yaga}> | 14-Feb-03/2:37 PM | Reply
Indeed, you are truly blessed. No oats. Breadcrumbs, and not the prepackaged sort. The preparation of food you are unwilling to eat is an intuitive process, as well. One must intuit what might make it exemplary, while remaining true to the classical version. Uh, what were we talking about again?
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