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Sunshine (Free verse) by alexander My roof blew off today
Now I can see the sun shine
And it can see me
Up the ladder:
End
Down the ladder:
Bed
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.804348
Posted: August 22, 2002 2:55 AM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2002 2:55 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.8043427 Overall Rank: 1688 Comments:
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Christof @ 195.172.133.226
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22-Aug-02/3:28 AM
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That's a very sanguine/innocent response to having your roof blown off - I like it.
sunshine...on my shoulders...makes me hapeeee...until i have to pay the damn deductible, that is. nice haiku, though.
A great image, I can see it... can it see me? 8/10
I see it too 10/10
You're so positive. Wonderful. I've been through some trials just like everyone else so this philosphy of striving for happiness is near an dear. 10
I love this one.
This made me laugh-10/10
Clever. One of you better works. But again, 10?
nice haiku.what happens at night? ahhh the pigeons have a better target...did i mention nice haiku. nice haiku!
won't you get wet !
it made me laugh twice 10/10
Look here you jealous peon, before you go into a poor poets list of work and give it all zeros so it falls from grace and of course, with all your petty user names, heighten your own stature, explain the reasoning behind your dislike to give something a 0. Come out from under your covers you measly writer of rubbish: ben/god/alex. Your work does not belong at that level. Hell, it cannot even stand up against mine. I am on to you, thanks to the Beaker, you foolish boy. Of course, you could be the Beaker.
PAKI, I think poemranker has gotten to you. You're throwing around accusations of multiple identities like... I don't know... but all I can say is, beakism didn't do it on poemranker with another username. Maybe it was Colonel Bustard.
I am kidding with you Beaker. But not with this God sort. He knows what he is doing.
you mean he has multiple voting level three? I couldn't find the Form of Extra Joining required to get the upgrade.
and I'm curious - what part did I play in this mystery?
I don't know? You told me about voting on your own poems. So maybe you have all the insight there. And maybe I'm off base, but when he is around, like this morning, certain poems in certain places always get zeros with know reasoning behind it. I do not mind a zero, but do not hide under a blanket. Tell me why. If he were to speak, he would merely say: it is to get his work higher. Not that this is a contest, but I just like to bitch. Or have you noticed.
I don't know? You told me about voting on your own poems. So maybe you have all the insight there. And maybe I'm off base, but when he is around, like this morning, certain poems in certain places always get zeros with know reasoning behind it. I do not mind a zero, but do not hide under a blanket. Tell me why. If he were to speak, he would merely say: it is to get his work higher. Not that this is a contest, but I just like to bitch. Or have you noticed.
Not at all.
What is this simple fare trying to appeal to the humour of the proletariat-it made me guffaw which indicates it is not altogether bad-maybe try a re-write at night would be my recommendation-8/10
nice poem! people should write, in my opinion, more simpler poems like this once in a while. simple and tasty! :)
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