poemranker ::you scare me like the rollercoaster by silvertongueddevil

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Free verse № 1506

you scare me like the rollercoaster

Member since 2002 · Posted 11 May 2002 · 3 comments

you scare me like the rollercoaster the one that won't be built because no climb no fall no loop loop loop can catch what's in your eye what moves your limbs changes your walk what bangs open the door and grabs and holds me and my eyes can't catch what's transmitted from your skin to my skin a morse code of muscle and bone of the deep body churning and the head fire burning and the heart like a hammer banging on a cage and the body ain't enough no kiss no touch no fuck and the message is failing and we're open mouthed mutes and it's in there and it's in there and it isn't coming out and we're pressed like meat but still not touching and if we do is why you scare me like the rollercoaster

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3 comments

[9] ==Doylum 4-Aug-02/2:46 PM Reply
oh whoow. I think i shall abandon my love for Handsom Pete and lick the horn-ed head of the silver cunning linguist.
[9] daniella 4-Aug-02/3:10 PM Reply
i have ridden one of those and got off as quick as i could to stand on firmer ground, and float effortless again.
[7] Venus 19-Aug-02/11:32 PM Reply
This manic, rambling style carries your obesession themes especially well. 7/10