| Re: My thoughts and I by bdub420 |
12-Jan-04/3:37 AM |
|
It's quite simple, like a song, which makes it effective but telling instead of showing, which bores me a bit.
|
|
|
 |
| Re: One Lump Or Two? by OneFingerAnswer |
12-Jan-04/3:57 AM |
|
Powerful words, excellent meter and rhythm.
|
|
|
|
| Re: The most trite garbage ever(in other words my love life) by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
12-Jan-04/6:07 AM |
|
No, no, please save it for yourself. Give us something entertaining, something I want to hear. And don't speak of daggers. Everyone knows there's no such thing.
|
|
|
|
| Re: The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz |
12-Jan-04/6:08 AM |
|
I like the style a lot, and wish I had found it carved into a desk.
|
|
|
|
| Re: deleted scenes by Bill Z Bub |
12-Jan-04/6:09 AM |
|
It totally hits. I don't know what I like about it but I still like it.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Sympathetic Guilt by middenHeap |
12-Jan-04/2:06 PM |
|
Intelligent. No con crit. Sorry.
|
|
|
|
| Re: van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus |
12-Jan-04/2:09 PM |
|
Painfulyl evocative. Plus it sounds like it's published.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie |
12-Jan-04/2:13 PM |
|
Simplistic but telling. I feel the part about the storks is slightly lacking, not really inforamtive. Perhaps relish whatever metaphor strikes you. Or perhaps keep it this way.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Perfect by mytenderrage |
18-Jan-04/8:52 AM |
|
It's lacking, poetically. It tells rather than showing. I like that you know what you're saying but at the same time I'd rather the words illustrated instead of just plonking down their meaning.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Nina Simone (part one) by zodiac |
8-Feb-04/8:51 AM |
|
I liked the second verse.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Flies by Red_is_life |
29-Feb-04/7:14 AM |
|
"Loneliness" is spelt wrong. It's not poetic. Poetry is show, not tell.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Ring Toss by Shin-Bojangles |
29-Feb-04/7:17 AM |
|
|
|
| Re: Cold Rain Road by middenHeap |
1-Mar-04/3:28 AM |
|
Liked the first half but "steel cubes" lost my interest. And the ending - must every poemranker poet discuss piss, shit or paedophilia in every goddamn poem? I can't take this vulgarity much longer. *le "tired artist" sigh*
|
|
|
|
| Re: rules by roses are read |
6-Mar-04/7:52 AM |
|
I get that pudgy hip thing too.
|
|
|
|
| Re: Always And Forever by Pooh_N_His_Honey |
6-Mar-04/9:12 AM |
|
|
|
