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One Lump Or Two? (Villanelle) by OneFingerAnswer
Washing broken dishes in a leaking sink
You're like coffee, a bitter mug
Yet, still we sit and drink
The words you speak, the things I think,
The pain, the love, the piss stained rug
Washing broken dishes in a leaking sink
Trying to catch your eye while you blink,
Awkwardness withholding a tempting hug,
Yet, again we sit and drink
Another crash, another crack, another clink,
Again you try to dispose of it with a shrug
Washing broken dishes in a leaking sink
Tears in eyes, emotions on the brink
Sadness turned to bitter hate, tug by tug
Yet, here we sit and drink
In hot water the memories shrink
Pass the salt and season the slug
Washing broken dishes in a leaking sink
Yet tomorrow we'll sit and drink
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Arithmetic Mean: 7.888889
Weighted score: 6.4444447
Overall Rank: 741
Posted: July 6, 2003 4:34 PM PDT; Last modified: July 6, 2003 6:00 PM PDT
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Why is that whenever I look at a poem and go back and change something it fucks everything to hell?
*Edits (again)*