regarding some deleted poem...	12-Mar-04/5:05 AM
Eight, because the last line was bitchy. Stop that.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-Mar-04/5:17 AM
I love the stone/home rhyme. Comforting end.
Re: Disgusting Stickmen by Bobjim	25-Mar-04/9:27 AM
This is concrete poetry.
regarding some deleted poem...	6-Apr-04/10:48 AM
Sadly, like Zodiac, I beklieve you could have cut the last four lines or so. "Windy sculptor" just doesn't sit. But otherwise the language is lively and engaging.
Re: The Hell With Growing Up by wilco	7-Apr-04/7:40 AM
Personally, I dislike cancer being used as a metaphor, especially for something like time because to me, the two things are entirely different. But this is hardly a constructive criticism. The final line isn't poetic but the sentiment could go very far and the couplet structure is probably the best form for it. Excellent start but as yet I consider it a bit of a rough gem.
regarding some deleted poem...	7-Apr-04/10:36 AM
'A partner for the race'?
Re: this old man (edit) by Bill Z Bub	7-May-04/1:35 AM
The first stanza is too much - I daren't say over-written - but the second has a ring to it.
Re: Starting Over by justjay	7-May-04/1:36 AM
Sadly, I kinda like it. But have you ever seen an abyss?
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-04/2:05 AM
Someone got bored whilst studying "The Highwayman"? I actually quite like it, but don't tell anyone. I think I think the structure but not the content, and they don't fit together is all.
Re: Desire by Chasz Misleading	9-Jun-04/1:42 PM
Naked and Bloody. Really? Sucks to be You, then, I spose.
Re: Sonnet on an Operating Table by Sasha	4-Jul-04/2:06 AM
Loved things like ": a knife", but please uncensor the beeps, as it were, it's like being at a clown party to be punctuated like this.
regarding some deleted poem...	11-Jul-04/2:35 AM
Cruelly, I stopped reading at strife. But the first verse was good. :\
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Jul-04/9:14 AM
Like it. Nice form. Odd but could work, given tweaks from experts.
Re: The Nude by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	16-Jul-04/1:26 AM
I dunno, it was a bit stupid but could be brilliant if you altered the last stanza. I spose.
Re: The Beautiful Chase by smlink84	16-Jul-04/1:27 AM
No love for this verse.
Re: Veins of spilt wine. by SupremeDreamer	18-Jul-04/1:56 PM
Cheer up love. "Rogue of the gallows" made me giggle a bit. Otherwise, que tu es formidable. (How you are formidable).
Re: the Heart is not unmade by broke by daggatolar	30-Aug-04/3:12 AM
I love it, but I think you could punctuate here: "no arm's/no arms' way out" somewhere after "is Art a way" and "root on the spot".
Re: Redemption by leigh137	14-Sep-04/10:53 AM
I think wrong/right should be right/wrong so that it doesn't rhyme. I like how chatty it is. :)
Re: ending by Eline	14-Sep-04/10:54 AM
Succinct. The kind of poem that sticks in heads. Yum.
regarding some deleted poem...	15-Sep-04/9:03 AM
I'm terribly sorry to have to tell you that you've misspelt peice. I assume it wasn't intentional?