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ending (Free verse) by Eline you want
a somewhat superstitious ending
to all this chaos
and delirious laughter
it would be good
but only after
something has happened
Up the ladder:
The Watching Brother
Down the ladder:
The Word
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Posted: July 27, 2002 2:13 AM PDT; Last modified: July 27, 2002 2:13 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.615798 Overall Rank: 12438 Comments:
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johnnyfontaine23 @ 195.92.168.168
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27-Jul-02/4:38 PM
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what has happened? Has someone told a joke? Not you, you are the most unfunniest person since Chris Arrowsmith....
Maybe a full line break after laughter would slow this down a bit and let it build more slowly.
Succinct. The kind of poem that sticks in heads. Yum.
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