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Free verse № 94948

The Beautiful Chase

Member since 2002 · Posted 24 Mar 2004 · Edited 24 Mar 2004 · 4 comments

As the crisp wind Blew through my face, I saw the moon Fly with grace. It mellowed me For I knew The sight would not last, Broken to tears I started to reminisce The past. High in the sky Floated the moon Passing through the broken clouds, As a mother intent on With a million vows. But that sight is gone For other eyes to witness, Because beauty is easily seen But difficult in comprehension. But through that comprehension I have come to understand, Why I thought of you When the moon floated away, Because I wanted to remember And capture it’s natural ways. But when I tried I saw your face, When it was beauty Whom I tried to chase.

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[6] Shuushin 25-Mar-04/6:38 AM Reply
problem with this:

"As a mother intent on
With a million vows."

the language use with all those conjunctions, prepositions and simple verbs doesn't do this much help.
[n/a] wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 25-Mar-04/9:26 AM Reply
Gosh!
[n/a] smlink84 › wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 25-Mar-04/6:40 PM Reply
What does that mean?
[2] fevriere 16-Jul-04/1:27 AM Reply
No love for this verse.