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The Beautiful Chase (Free verse) by smlink84
As the crisp wind
Blew through my face,
I saw the moon
Fly with grace.
It mellowed me
For I knew
The sight would not last,
Broken to tears I started to reminisce
The past.
High in the sky
Floated the moon
Passing through the broken clouds,
As a mother intent on
With a million vows.
But that sight is gone
For other eyes to witness,
Because beauty is easily seen
But difficult in comprehension.
But through that comprehension
I have come to understand,
Why I thought of you
When the moon floated away,
Because I wanted to remember
And capture itâs natural ways.
But when I tried
I saw your face,
When it was beauty
Whom I tried to chase.
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Posted: March 24, 2004 9:22 PM PST; Last modified: March 24, 2004 9:23 PM PST
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"As a mother intent on
With a million vows."
the language use with all those conjunctions, prepositions and simple verbs doesn't do this much help.