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Of an Age Before

by cleverdevice

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Jan 2004 · 3 comments

Starched white, bleached With Sun's burning scorch. Prone, sprawled, contorted By sinews of an age before. Stiff, brittle, still In long, lush fronds And mottled green. Grains of sand creep towards, The stricken form. The desert's bare clench takes, Inch, by inch, by inch And covers the skeletal figure, Reclaiming life, Of an age before.

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[5] annabellee 30-Jan-04/7:53 PM Reply
"long lush fronds" take us right out of the desert.
The contrast doesn't make sense.
[7] NanceXToo 31-Jan-04/12:08 PM Reply
Not bad. Good imagery. Too many commas in S2.
[n/a] cleverdevice › NanceXToo 2-Feb-04/7:02 AM Reply
Yeah, true