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Of an Age Before (Free verse) by cleverdevice Starched white, bleached
With Sun's burning scorch.
Prone, sprawled, contorted
By sinews of an age before.
Stiff, brittle, still
In long, lush fronds
And mottled green.
Grains of sand creep towards,
The stricken form.
The desert's bare clench takes,
Inch, by inch, by inch
And covers the skeletal figure,
Reclaiming life,
Of an age before.
Up the ladder:
Pebbles
Down the ladder:
Lost Love
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Posted: January 30, 2004 2:05 AM PST; Last modified: January 30, 2004 2:05 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.880797 Overall Rank: 10171 Comments:
Not bad. Good imagery. Too many commas in S2.
Yeah, true
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The contrast doesn't make sense.