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am i on speaker phone? good~ (Free verse) by peaceseeker
when time stands still and tracy's turned down when your eyes search from your soul's depths into mine, that's when my heart feels love. so destiny struck again and hope is all i know our energies converge two tidal waves crashing white spray, into foam and from foam into air. asking for forever love on both ends, balance the agreement to fly both pair of angel wings lifting and taking flight swooping into his arms.

Up the ladder: No more goodbye
Down the ladder: The Beautiful Chase

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.880797
Overall Rank: 10149
Posted: May 24, 2004 8:46 AM PDT; Last modified: May 24, 2004 8:46 AM PDT
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[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 216.196.150.5 | 24-May-04/10:54 AM | Reply
too personal without any true depth. Just Emoting, and not even very strongly. Nice imagery but it feels like its coming from nowhere only to end up going nowhere. No suggestions, because I'm not really sure how you could make this better.
[n/a] peaceseeker @ 63.164.145.33 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 26-May-04/12:59 PM | Reply
my skin is hereby tougher~
[8] sliver @ 63.190.81.32 | 24-May-04/9:12 PM | Reply
I do like the imagery though, especially the foam spraying. 8
[n/a] peaceseeker @ 63.164.145.33 > sliver | 26-May-04/1:00 PM | Reply
wow, i really needed that - this was from my soul ~ sometimes compliments give breath where there is life.
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