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am i on speaker phone? good~ (Free verse) by peaceseeker

when time stands still and tracy's turned down when your eyes search from your soul's depths into mine, that's when my heart feels love. so destiny struck again and hope is all i know our energies converge two tidal waves crashing white spray, into foam and from foam into air. asking for forever love on both ends, balance the agreement to fly both pair of angel wings lifting and taking flight swooping into his arms.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 24-May-04/10:54 AM
too personal without any true depth. Just Emoting, and not even very strongly. Nice imagery but it feels like its coming from nowhere only to end up going nowhere. No suggestions, because I'm not really sure how you could make this better.




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