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Perfect (Free verse) by mytenderrage Look at you.
You are so perfect.
You found your desires
And wishes.
You have it all now.
You will be happy.
You will be joyous.
Going on with your perfect life
With your perfect love.
You will love her forever,
I???m sad to admit it???s true,
Because you two are perfect.
Perfect passion and adoration.
Where does that leave me?
In the dark corner of hopelessness,
I wish I could find someone perfect,
But I cannot find him.
Up the ladder:
Stranger
Down the ladder:
Why?
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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5555556
Posted: July 29, 2002 3:22 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2002 3:22 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.2777777 Overall Rank: 13152 Comments:
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razorgrin @ 142.166.109.174
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29-Jul-02/4:23 PM
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stay in your dark corner.forever.
the sharks have come to smell your work. they have left nothing for me, but a raven crushed stain upon the road 18 mls. south of davenport, your beak is bent and pointing south east. follow. follow the 'hoof' its shape is right(write)o
It's lacking, poetically. It tells rather than showing. I like that you know what you're saying but at the same time I'd rather the words illustrated instead of just plonking down their meaning.
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