Re: she wonders, by <~>	23-Aug-02/9:57 AM
That's tough. I'd like to see a poem about that. Is there one? Also I saw a beautiful guitar shaped poem of yours but had to leave my desk and now I can't find it. What's the title?
Re: 22nd Anniversary by Frass	23-Aug-02/9:51 AM
Good good good! Surely your blooming is a lovely thing sounds wonderful. Great 8/10
Re: she wonders, by <~>	23-Aug-02/9:43 AM
All other thoughts left far behind??? what does she want. She sounds like she wants him to take her there. The more I read it the more I like it.
Re: it must be nice. (or: why i don't write much about my past) by kthulah	23-Aug-02/9:38 AM
yes darling, but what did you think of the poem?
Re: she wonders, by <~>	23-Aug-02/9:37 AM
Maybe he'll opt-out for dignity, or maybe he'll realize he might not get another chance for a while. A bird in the bed is better then 2 in the bar. Take it while you can... that's my motto. I enjoy the representation of a femme waiting for the man to make a move. I suppose that has something to do with dignity too. But my head tells me it's got more to do with gender roles and good girl ethics. Both are still prevelant out there, so that makes this poem valuable. 6/10
Re: it must be nice. (or: why i don't write much about my past) by kthulah	23-Aug-02/9:27 AM
It's got 1 decent phrase in it, otherwise it's ridiculous. I mean if you bought a book and this was the kind of poetry you found in it you would be disappointed. Just because you can write doesn't mean you can Write. 1/10 for femenist communion cup.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/9:20 AM
You already are making a fool of yourself. Life is short,loves about the only worthwhile thing in it. Pride is a cold comfort.
Re: drum circle by <~>	23-Aug-02/9:19 AM
I like the last 3 stanzas and the image at the end. But if somethings worth writing about, it's worth writing well. This needs refining.
Re: Dignity by kthulah	23-Aug-02/9:07 AM
But men appreciation do not fire... makes no sense. Huaghty laugh sounds awkward. And what's so dignified about unrequited love? The last couplet gets a 5/10
Re: Why I want to kill Opie by Bachus	23-Aug-02/2:13 AM
I thinks you smell a facist. So do I
Re: Butcher by Christof	23-Aug-02/2:00 AM
Venom mitigated. I am all lovely muted hopefulness. Thanks for the poem.
Re: A Choir Boy's Spoiliation.. by Bachus	22-Aug-02/11:54 PM
it's genuine social commentary. Bacchus is in there with the riff-raff. He's got one eye open, his left hand on the bottle and his right hand on the truth of it.
Re: Flight of the Samurai (Act II) by Shin-Bojangles	22-Aug-02/11:47 PM
Could've been good if you tried. 0/10
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	22-Aug-02/11:43 PM
Just kidding.... I'm sure you're a well ajusted man/boy/male Gender is all about organs and chromosones. SEXUALITY is everything else. Your SEXUALITY is diffucult to define, your gender is not either male/female/hermaphrodite that's it your limited to 3. pick one!
Re: Awesome Heir by Shin-Bojangles	22-Aug-02/11:36 PM
To little to late. It's been over for hours. Don't br such a dick.
Re: The plains of Africa by horus8	22-Aug-02/11:34 PM
This is not a poem. It's an epic. I love you. You're one of the chosen. Nobody here will get it. But I do. It's always the same story. The public is so lost in it's own bum-hole that they can't see it. I've seen them on their deasth beds struggling to hold on completely oblivious. You know how to live with the grace of a true lover of wisdom. Grace be with you.
Re: I like Cake by skaskowski	22-Aug-02/11:16 PM
The 1st paragraph gets a ten. The rest doesn't
Re: brown is the eat feminine deoderant gross and stuff mmm styrofoam right? by skaskowski	22-Aug-02/11:12 PM
I love you, will you marry me? I've been wading through so much unbelievable mundane trivia these peon's call "poetry" Bless you. 10/10
Re: The Seasons, Changes by Frass	22-Aug-02/10:56 PM
This poem is confused. Seasoned meanings? O.K.... I have to give this a Zero. p.s. I was thinking about your previous comment regarding my poems being anti-men, and I realized the poems were so far from that. Untitled- is about the ectasy of the God/nature experience, Queen Anne's Escape is about the suicide of Anne Sexton, and The Hiakus are about the feminine aspect of creation. Were's the gender bias? Maybe your just afraid of me.
Re: {Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8	22-Aug-02/6:06 PM
exelente, mi amigo! I'm telling you haiku is your ticket to... I mean i's more like your antidote, your Ridilan.