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Life On Earth (Free verse) by dougsoderstrom Life (Freeform) by The Unknown Poet
Born without choice,
We are thrust into life,
Struggling to stay alive,
Knowing that we must die,
Searching for a God,
Who can never be found,
Our souls cry out for deliverance,
For a way to escape,
The terrible realization,
That there is no way out!
Up the ladder:
Coat hanger
Down the ladder:
Multicultural motel
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Posted: August 22, 2002 10:03 AM PDT; Last modified: August 22, 2002 10:03 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7310586 Overall Rank: 11820 Comments:
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22-Aug-02/10:28 AM
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oh there is a sure and swift way out. i'll be the first to volunteer to help in THAT endeavor...
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dougsoderstrom @ 207.80.112.1
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3-Aug-04/8:43 AM
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Hell is no way out.....It is not deliverance!
NOT AT ALL NOVEL
Thanks for the compliment........scumbag!
if this is about life it should be much funnier
Life is not funny!
There is no way out, you are right we're all bound towards death. But that's something a 5 year old discovers. Make this work, focus on some specific experience or moment which made you feel this, and write about the experience, not the philosophy
Thanks for the rec.
I apologize for being rude. i'm embarrased by that first comment I left a few days ago. The point I was trying to make is it's better to use allegory if you want an emoitional response from your audience.
I understand....and thanks again.
i thought this was cool, who gave this a one, that's total bs, yeah some people hate rhymes, but this had some substance and connection to the every day person who feels trapped...i hoped i spelled rhyme right.
Thanks, Cat. Thanks for the nice compliment!
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