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Reflected, Dreamed

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Aug 2002 · 9 comments

Rent, spurned spent, turned freshly cut and newly burned a shattering clack emitted, screamed echoes alone reflected, dreamed... refraction back enfolded, preened a merging moan from deep is gleaned harmonic swell is upward beamed a fragile life is held between.

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[n/a] poetandknowit 18-Aug-02/9:56 PM Reply

Huh? you spent the rent on freshly cut crack? But then again lots of lawn mowing imagery. Wow! Excellent work!!

[n/a] Frass 18-Aug-02/10:09 PM Reply

Thanks, PAKI. Cycle of existence deal. Your mission, you mangy whelp, should you choose to accept it; read 'Poem in October' by Dylan Thomas, out loud.

[n/a] poetandknowit 18-Aug-02/10:13 PM Reply

My favorite Thomas poems are his B-day poems. I like to read those in the state he was always in. Did I mention that the above poem is brillant!

[8] god'swife 22-Aug-02/5:28 PM Reply

Cheers! I don't know what thiws is about but it's well done a that's what counts. Although I can never get use to sentences being turned on their behinds for sake of a rhymn. (fromdeepisgleaned,isupwardbeamed)how about deeply gleaned and upwardly beamed.

[7] ==Doylum 23-Aug-02/7:19 PM Reply

thats what counts? if you don't know what its about whats the point? Oh lovely use of words, sorry i don't get you but it was rather well argued wasn't it chaps?
Yelp. What was that, oh i think it was a little puppy. Frass i think your super. 7/10

[5] Christof 27-Aug-02/7:36 AM Reply

I find the rhymes a little too facile -the syntactical contortions that you employ to produce the rhymes ('from deep is gleaned') are correspondingly awkward. But maybe it's just because I don't like Dylan Thomas either...

[8] Amelia 3-Sep-02/2:35 PM Reply

Frass, I like it. :-)

[8] royalflesh 11-Sep-02/9:01 PM Reply

good turns, transitions, juxations. Upside down i read and see a meaning that is very, incredibly gleaming. Love it. Love it. 8/10

[n/a] Frass › royalflesh 12-Sep-02/9:03 AM Reply

I like you, royalflesh.