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Reflected, Dreamed (Free verse) by Frass

Rent, spurned spent, turned freshly cut and newly burned a shattering clack emitted, screamed echoes alone reflected, dreamed... refraction back enfolded, preened a merging moan from deep is gleaned harmonic swell is upward beamed a fragile life is held between.

Christof 27-Aug-02/7:36 AM
I find the rhymes a little too facile -the syntactical contortions that you employ to produce the rhymes ('from deep is gleaned') are correspondingly awkward. But maybe it's just because I don't like Dylan Thomas either...




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